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untitled [Spiderman bouncetreads...]
By mmSeason
02 May 2007
This one's probably not immediately accessible. Worth reading, therefore, more than once... at least i hope it's worth it.


(c) mmSeason 2001


Spiderman bouncetreads the downhill pavement
through the churchyard, cheeks ice-creamy,
face sulky, shredded twig between his fingers,
just too far behind thirsty mother
for her to hear his hot commentary clearly.
Cotswold-stone church behind; stone wall
with black iron railings given tempo
by that frayed stick; gravestones and crosses
all declaring loyalties, some legible still;
path of stone as ageful as the stones wall church 
sentiments; so old so ever-unaltered
as the round yews, as the round clouds –
renewed today and daily, yet every year, ever, so.
Mother teeter-totter down the paved path catchfollowing
her baby on wheels – poising a carton a crisp pack
a sweaty bust swollen pair of knees
fragile patience and straining to keep up
with Spiderman’s account of nursery –
sees the sunshine glaring at the buggy’s
lightweight aluminium frame, sees the sameness,
maybe doesn’t see today the youngness
of her baby, maybe not the oldness
of the stones, the same same singularity
of each remembered soul, each unique role
as like the others as its unique neighbour.
Each cloud-edge wisp, each dark green branchlet
patterns itself newly and is undistinguished.

Reviews
quite accessible
Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 2nd May 2007
and worth accessing  
 
patterjack
Time
Written by Diplomat (28 comments posted) 2nd May 2007
a lifetime's journey in a poem, all of its ages portrayed. 
Thank you  
Diplomat
detailed
Written by fellpony (1617 comments posted) 2nd May 2007
but still accessible; expressing well the minute differences that make up the overall sameness of existence. Enjoyed.

Written by Lizzy (803 comments posted) 2nd May 2007
I can't express my opinion on it as a poem but I thought it was very good. Enjoyed it on first read and on subsequent reads got even more from it. 
A very visual piece and I liked the contrast between old and new. 
Good one. 
Lizzy
Thanx folx
Written by mmSeason (32 comments posted) 3rd May 2007
...as it's had a mixed reception elsewhere, so this is a relief. (Any title ideas by any chance?) 
mand

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