Great Writing - Home > Short S. > Double or Nothing
READING ROOM
Great Writing - Home
Read and review others' work
Articles on writing
Advice from the community
COMMUNITY
Talk to others in the forums
Events and Competitions
GW News
ABOUT GREAT WRITING
All About Us
Contact Us
WORK AWAITING REVIEW
GW IS...
Great Writing creative writing community is designed to prompt ideas and provide inspiration and motivation within aspiring and amateur authors. Whatever your topic; from love poetry to Doctor Who or Harry Potter fan fiction, Great Writing's online writing group is where you can make new friends and improve your creative writing.
WHO'S ONLINE
We have 1899 guests online and 5 members online
Shorts
Double or Nothing
By Snodlander
04 May 2007
“Gavrilo, one more.  Just one more drink.  Can’t Bosnians hold their liquor?  The Austrians, now, they can drink like real men.”

“I can drink, drink any bloody Austrian under the table.  Austrian beer is piss weak.  Only, I’ve got something I need to do tomorrow.”  The young Bosnian looked into the bottom of the near-empty tankard.  “I’ve got a job.  I need a clear head tomorrow.”

His friend laughed.  “I thought real men never got hangovers.  You’ve talked nothing but politics all evening, you need another drink to lighten up.  Put some fire in your belly.”  He waved to the barkeep.  “Two more beers over here, landlord.  My friend and I need to enjoy ourselves.”

Gavrilo Princip shook his head, then immediately regretted it as the room spun.  “How can I enjoy myself?  How can anyone that calls himself a Bosnian enjoy himself, under the heel of the Austrian invaders?”  He stood up and shouted, “Long live Bosnia!” then collapsed heavily back into his chair.

Gavrilo’s drinking companion laughed all the more.  “What about Serbia?”

“Yeah, long live them too, if it gets us out from under those fat bastards’ empire.”

The landlord placed two fresh tankards of beer in front of the men.  He had a sour look on his face.  “Tell your friend to keep it down.  I don’t want the secret police closing me down.  The town is full of them for tomorrow’s visit.”

Gavrilo suddenly became serious.  “No, no, you’re right.  I have to keep sober.  Sober and quiet.  Got a job to do tomorrow.  I told you I didn’t want another beer… erm… erm… wassyername?”

“Jusuf.  And it’s only one more beer.  Here, a toast.  To Bosnia-Herzegovina.  What?  You call yourself a Bosnian and you won’t drink to your homeland?”

Gavrilo grabbed Jusuf’s wrist.  “Don’t you ever say that.  By God, don’t you ever say I’m not a Bosnian.  If you knew.  If you knew what I was prepared to do for my country.”  He grabbed the tankard and held it high.

“To Bosnia, mother of my people!”  He sank half the contents in a long draught.

“Gavrilo, I apologise.  Honestly I do.  We have only met this evening and I can see already that you are a true patriot.  I never for one moment thought you anything less.  Here, I’m sorry.  Really.  Let me make it up to you.  Landlord!  A bottle of vodka over here, and two glasses.  We have two patriots, two real men, who need to toast each other with a real man’s drink.”

“No, I told you, I’m not drinking tonight.  I’m staying sober.  Got to pay my respects to the high and mighty Austrian prince tomorrow.”

“Exactly, my friend.  Beer befuddles the mind and weakens the heart.  Vodka, now!  Vodka sharpens the mind and strengthens the resolve.  Just one glass, and it will undo the glass or two of beer we sampled this evening.”  Jusuf filled the two small shot glasses with vodka.  “To our Serbian allies, God bless them all.”

“Just so long as you realise I’m staying sober,” replied Gavrilo, tossing back the spirit.


***


Gavrilo sat slumped across the table, moaning occasionally in his stupor.  Jusuf stood and made his way over to the corner table and grinned at the man sat there.

“See?  I told you I could do it.  He’s far too drunk to get up tomorrow morning, let alone assassinate Duke Ferdinand.  I told you I could stop World War I with a level six intervention.  Now, how much did we bet?”

“Yeah, yeah.  OK, you won.  Double or nothing?”

“What did you have in mind?”

“Now you’ve stopped it, start it again with another level six intervention that won’t get picked up by the time auditors.”

Reviews
Time travel
Written by Fledermaus (3306 comments posted) 4th May 2007
Nice twist in the end. Yet I wonder if it'd work. Someone would have started World War I anyhow. 
 
It raises a lot of interesting questions though. If someone would be able to do this, we would never know it. So far for Startrek and its temporal prime directive ;) 
 
With all your scifi pieces you could almost start a series of your own.
I Like The Idea..
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 4th May 2007
of time travellers gambling on past events, nice reversal of the old 'Time traveller getting tomorrows horse race results' chestnut. 
Definitely one for the historians. 
My double or nothing option would be to find the other six members of the Black Hand Gang and give them each a huge jug of steaming hot black coffee. 
Re: The maus's suggestion, how about several of us GW Sci-fi writers getting together and pushing our collective works out to agents?  
'A Collection of Short Sci-fi stories by Unknown Authors from Another Dimension' 
I think I'd try just about anything at the moment! 
Best wishes 
Steve.

Written by wltshr (314 comments posted) 4th May 2007
Love the idea that such a major event was subverted just for the sake of a bet. 
 
Nicely written and very odd. 
 
Regards 
 
Wltshr

Written by Janie (265 comments posted) 5th May 2007
was this like quantum leap? were they time travellers going back to change the course of history by gambling? cool idea. i never got the impression they were in 1914 though, i think 'piss weak' probably wouldn't have been an expression in those days. :grin great twist, i didn't expect that.
Not sure
Written by Asferthecat (834 comments posted) 5th May 2007
After thinking about this I am not sure that it wouldn't be improved by knowing that it was a group of time travellers from the beginning. The tension being whether the secret police would discover them before they stopped Gavrilo. 
The twist being that the secret police were about to arrest Gavrilo but in trying to arrest the time guy as well they created such confusion that Gavrilo escaped and did the deed. 
Of course it means he would lose the bet. 
Anyway I enjoyed the atmosphere etc it was well written. 
Can I put a couple of stories in your anthology?

Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 5th May 2007
Didn't the end coming. Imagine, if something like this could have actually happened..then who knows..things could have been better or worse. But a nicely written piece. Good imagination.  
 
Regards, 
TT

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 6th May 2007
I'm not a history buff so didn't see the end coming at all. A great little concept. I love stories that play with time and leave you thinking "what if". This one is cleverer than that in as much as it is sort of circular, taking you back to what actually happened.It's the only sort of sci-fi I can handle [that and Tom Holt] I'm sure there is a series here with these time travellers 
cheers 
jane

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 8th May 2007
Very clever idea - especially as you tidy up at the end with the suggestion that Archduke F will cop for it anyway. Very Terry Pratchet. 
 
Phil.

   Only registered users can rate and write comments.
   Please login or register.

Powered by AkoComment 2.0!

 Previous item   Next item