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Where man burns books...
By Fledermaus
06 May 2007
The teenage girl walked through the empty streets, past the shattered windows, her long coat fluttering around her bare legs. Much of the glass was still lying on the pavement. Expensive, shop window glass. She looked at the signs above the hollow gaps, searching for that one...
As she approached the shop, she saw it lying on the ground, in front of the smashed door, dirty with footprints and broken, but as she looked at it, she saw it was his.
Once the old man had repaired her doll. He had restored her broken face and apart from a thin line, no scars remained from that operation. Now little Heidi had her home at the neighbour's daughter's, who cared for her like a real mother. The teenage girl had visited her often and made clothes for the toy, but the face always reminded her of the skillful toymaker. He had inspired her, with his skill, but more so with his stories, for he seemed to know every fairy tale by heart and the children loved to come to his shop, just to listen to what he had to tell.

She pushed against the remains of the door and looked inside. Dolls were scattered over the floor. Wooden arms, legs and heads, splinters of porcelain, torn tiny clothes.
Carefully she stept inside, afraid to step on one of the liveless limbs. She walked towards the counter and looked to the place were he had lain. Brown smears marked the place where his head had hit the furniture.
She felt how her throat was grabbed by an invisible hand, how her heart turned into ice and saw how her fingers trembled as she touched the bloody marks. Tears reached the corners of her mouth and she wept them away with her sleeve.
Here he had always been, standing behind this counter, when he told them about Snow White and the dwarfs, the little mermaid, the sleeping beauty...

She opened the drawer where she knew he kept his secret, but it was empty. It couldn't be. Even if they would commit such blasphemy, surely she would find some pieces, some torn pages or crumbled paper. She looked around, but where could he have hidden it inside this mess? Where was his book, his manuscript? Or would they have stolen it? To read it to their own children? How wicked would that be after all they had done? Would such people even have children? She shivered at the idea that one of those people could be someone's father.

She heard the footsteps in the street. The glass crackled under them, and they seemed to approach fastly and with force.
Then they halted, and as she looked at the pale light in the opening, she could see the silhouette of a young man.
" Raus!", he yelled, and he pointed to the street.
She bit her lip. Perhaps he had done it. Perhaps this very same stormtrooper had been here tonight and... She hardly dared to think about it... And killed him...
He stept inside and his blue gaze was fixed on her, his cruel lips but a thin line. He rose his arm again, slowly, his index-finger stretched. Then he pointed at the door. His voice was soft, but clear, and just the quietness with which he repeated the order scared her.
" Raus, maedchen..."

She felt as if he sucked her soul out, right through her eyes and stumbling over the broken dolls she reached for the exit. She gasped for breath, but gathered the courage to look back. Then she saw it through the gap, lying in the fireplace was the scorched cover of the notebook she knew so well...

Reviews
Hi Fledermaus
Written by jean.day (2231 comments posted) 6th May 2007
Very poignant this story. Is it based on something that happened, as so many of your stories are? 
 
But you know what the teenage girl should do - write it all down herself. She remembered the stories, so it was up to her to reconstruct them.  
 
I don't like the idea of stories being lost.
A bit confused
Written by Asferthecat (816 comments posted) 6th May 2007
I'm a bit confused by this one. You say the storm trouper might have killed him tonight but it's daylight - and the blood stains are brown rather than red. 
Plus the stories he told are all old chestnuts so they weren't lost. 
Plus I thought she was little Heidi for an ultra-confused moment. 
Apart from the confusion - which could be my fault, I thought it well written and atmospheric 
:?

Written by Janie (265 comments posted) 7th May 2007
i had an idea that this was to do with nazi germany and the persecution of the jews...think it was the the german language that brought me to that conclusion and also the unexplained destruction of the toy shop and old man. The burning of the fairytale book..possibly written by jewish writers? 
 
a very stark atmosphere to this and a good piece of descriptive writing. 
 
i do think you have too many adj in the first line and it kind of clogs the opening up a bit - despite giving us a good picture. you have a every noun modified, and for me it would flow better if you cut some out and went about showing us the scene in a different way. 
 
The teenage girl walked through the empty streets, past the shattered windows, her long coat fluttering around her bare legs. 
 
also you have stept instead of stepped...but i would cut that anyway as you have 'step' in the same line a few words on.... 
 
Carefully she stept inside, afraid to step on one of the liveless limbs. 
 
 
I really liked this bit.. 
 
Threatingly he stepped inside and his blue gaze was fixed on her 
 
although i don't think you need 'threateningly' as you show us through his looks and words that he's threatening..'blue gaze'... i love that! also like how you end with the ashes and scorched pages in the fireplace...sad yet strong and kind of symbolic of the end of the fairy tales, the end of the jews. 
 
Very thought provoking piece all together. 
 

Written by Lizzy (783 comments posted) 7th May 2007
Agree with Janie. a well written and interesting piece which in a few words says a lot. 
 
Have you read The Book Thief at all, a wonderful book set in Nazi Germany. 
 
Enjoyed 
Lizzy

Written by Fledermaus (3207 comments posted) 7th May 2007
Thanks Jean, Asferthecat, and Janie. 
While writing this I was constantly interrupted and I changed it a bit too often without rereading it, so that's probably why it's rather unpolished... :sigh  
 
Jean: Yes, it's based on history. This is set on the morning of november 11, 1938, in some German town... The morning after the Kristalnacht. 
The title I've stolen from Heinrich Heine... "There were Man burns books, Man will burn human beings eventually"...  
I've never read anything by that author, but I think the burning of books is indeed an indication of things to come. In the end it is an act of burning someone's legacy... 
 
Asferthecat: I had thought of changing 'her face' into 'its face', but then I thought it'd be interesting if the only named person was a doll, so Heidy had to be a 'she'... 
You're right about the stories. I was wondering for some time too if maybe he should have written something himself, or maybe it had to be an old, expensive fairy-tale book. 
As for the stormtrooper being the murderer. This is set at the morning after the old man was killed. I supose the stains of blood would have dried up after one night. 
 
Janie: You've got that right. The toymaker was a Jew, and he was murdered by the nazis after they destroyed his shop. 
Thanks for the advice. I'll clean it up. :)

Written by Fledermaus (3207 comments posted) 7th May 2007
Thanks Lizzy. 
I haven't read that book. It's shocking to see how they slowly worked towards the holocaust and made violence not only acceptable, but even encouraged it...

Written by Janie (265 comments posted) 7th May 2007
yes, the german people were fed propaganda and brainwashed into believing what was heppening was right and acceptable.

Written by Fledermaus (3207 comments posted) 7th May 2007
Thanks again Janie. 
I wonder how the average German citizen must have seen those riots. Surely many must at last have realized at last who they had elected five years earlier. 
Thinking about that, I wonder who the Germans were lying to when after the war they said they had not known about what happened to the Jews... It must have been a terrible thing on their conscience to know that they allowed this to happen.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 7th May 2007
The minute I saw 'Man burns books' I had an idea; 'shattered glass' confirmed that this was about Kristalnacht. I loved the image of the girl's coat flapping about her legs, the crunch of the glass under her feet. 'Kristalnacht' is a beautiful name for a terrible event, it has always seemed to me... 
 
I thought this was a very well-written story, and my only complaint would be the one made above by Asferthecat, that the stories, being classics, could not have been lost. I think I would change it so that these stories were either entirely original, or all classics, but told in such a distinctive way that they could not easily be duplicated.  
 
You do think, when you hear of Germans who protest innocence of what happened during the war, that they were either the most naive people in the world with no interest in what was going on around them, or terminally stupid. Surely neither of these interpretations is correct. I suspect that it was more of a case of people allowing fear to get the better of their scruples. And then after the shame and poverty of post WWI, they were ready for a change -- and then in stepped Hitler.

Written by Fledermaus (3207 comments posted) 7th May 2007
Thanks Witzl. 
I supose Asferthecat and you are right. I wasn't too sure about the kind of book myself, but it just had to be in there, because I thought that quote so clearly described what was going on there (even while it was written a century earlier!). 
 
Somehow I think most Germans did not know what the nazis were going to do when they were elected in 1933. Who would vote for someone who says he's going to kill 6 million civilians and plunge the world into the most destructive war it'll ever see? 
And the first years they may have been blinded by the economic succeses, but surely after the Kristalnacht, they must have noticed something was terribly wrong? Yet then it was probably too late already. 
 
I think that after the war most Germans must have been terribly ashamed about what happened and that they probably tried to convince themselves of being stupid rather than the outsiders. Perhaps that's what's still going on in Japan... That people are just too ashamed of what had happened to recognize the truth.
Picky bits
Written by Asferthecat (816 comments posted) 7th May 2007
Can't you say when the old man had repaired Heidi? Then everyone would know Heidi was the doll. Or am I the only one easily confused? 
The bit that confused me about the timing may have been a typo " this very same stormtrooper had been here tonight and... " Should tonight have been last night? 
As for the genocide, I vaguely remember that an Englishman wrote the book that started it all. The French enthusiastically joined in. The guilt is Europe's, not just Germany's.

Written by TwistedTales (544 comments posted) 8th May 2007
People have already covered most of the points. But I would still say that i really enjoyed reading this. Seemed very real. I could almost imagine the scene. It gave me goosebumps, when the invaders come to the shop again and see the girl, i was as tense as the character herself. Nice work.  
 
Regards, 
TT

Written by Fledermaus (3207 comments posted) 8th May 2007
Thanks TT and thanks again Asferthecat. 
I'll try to clean this piece up a bit once I find some time :) Glad you liked it.

Written by Phil (6549 comments posted) 10th May 2007
Very atmospheric piece Fledermaus. Lots to like about it. It does need a bit of a polish, but it's well worth the effort. 
 
Witzl's comment: 'Kristalnacht' is a beautiful name for a terrible event - I've always felt that too. 
 
Phil.

Written by Fledermaus (3207 comments posted) 11th May 2007
Thanks Phil. 
I had looked up where the name came from. It seems it had to do with the type of glass shopwindows were made from...

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