Yes, 14 lines , but NOT a sonnet, and certainly not poetry.
To whom it may concern :
The art of sophistry in you has never died .
I know you 'll claim that you have never lied ,
but the Cretan paradox of Epimenides
may well apply to you , because you seize
on every opportunity you can take
to push each point you feel that you can make.
Nit picking , hair splitting , every kind of ruse
will serve your purpose. and you're sure to use
each and every one that helps you win
though justification for it's extremely thin !
In argument , whether it's great or small
you have to prove you're superior to us all.
You ! artist in twisting truth ! it's to your shame
that you're Liar Liar in everything but name .
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Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 7th May 2007 |
| fierce and biting Brian - well constructed as usual and the sort of thing I'd GLADLY send to one or two people I can think of. (Mostly political animals, I hasten to add.) |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 7th May 2007 |
| PMed |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 7th May 2007 |
How come it isn't poetry? I mean it rhymes like poetry and scans like poetry. And it carries a message. OK, you're not enthusing over a Grecian Urn or some daffodils, but no-ones says you have to. Larkin's poem about parents was hard hitting but it was still poetry.
It's a poem and a good one and has us all wondering; is it about me?
cheers
Jane |
Written by Sunny (12 comments posted) 7th May 2007 |
| Very strong. I like the second last line, the exclamation works really well. Agree with the comment above, it's still poetry. Wld love to know why you think otherwise? |
lol
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 7th May 2007 |
First :
It is more about politicians than most other folk , although excluding the nicer people on this site (like the reviewers above ), there may be one or two whom I hope it miffed .
Is it poetry ? Well yes , it rhymes ( not weakly either ! ) and it trots along happily with reasonable metrics.
It does have a message for anyone capable in undertanding language content and form . Conversational , it leads to a put down as any good argument might .
But-- to me it came too easily for a start -- it was dashed off in a few moments and did not get worked on.
It lacks humanity --as so much of my occasional and satirical verse does. And lack of humanity is why I feel I will never be better than second rate as a writer
It does not illuminate anythng for the good of mankind -- it's negative not positive as I feel good poetry should be .
Despite Sylvia Plath -- savagery is not enough .
But thanks again , anyway
patterjack
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Hi Brian
Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 10th May 2007 |
I was looking for something of yours to review, and found this. I sort of felt like Jane and wondered who you were getting at.
It, of course, is a very good piece of writing, whether it is a sonnet or poetry or not. I found your definition of what poetry should be very interesting. It is quite a mammoth task - illuminating something for the good of mankind. I would say that probably most of us would not qualify. I also find it interesting that you put yourself down because it was so easy to write. My writing comes easily, or doesn't come at all. If I have to work and worry about it, I don't do it. I'm afraid to ask you what that makes me.
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General
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 10th May 2007 |
Not totally directed at any one individual --I had one far at the back of my mind but it was more about politicians and the like.
Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of mankind is something I believe -- and they are far ahead of both philosophers and politicians ,each of whom could be considered as garbage collectors
By illuminate I meant something along the line of Pope's words What oft was thought but ne'er so well expressed.
I do work my material quite a lot --and as this piece came out so easily it made me suspicious of me !
patterjack |
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