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Smudge
By AnnieSeed
09 May 2007
I wrote this a few years ago after the death of a pet cat. She had hypoglycaemia which makes an animal lose weight rapidly even though it eats ravenously. This led a neighbour to believe we were starving her, and he turned up on our doorstep one evening to reprimand us. In telling me off, he mentioned that he'd given her a whole pint of milk to drink.  Cats of course don't tolerate cows milk very well even when they're in the best of health, the milk gave her severe diarrhoea and she died two days later.

It was a short journey
Carried in his arms
Out from the kitchen where we found you
Deep in your last untroubled sleep
Into the sunlit garden where we laid you
By the lavender and hollyhocks
Beside the shady trees.

And we remember still the waving tail
The wide green eyes that lost their glowing fire
The assertive voice that dwindled to weary silence
The heart of such high courage and determination and
The valiant spirit that bore you out into the unknown dark
Where now you hunt mice and bats and voles
Beneath an ever-waxing moon.

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3351 comments posted) 9th May 2007
A great little poem, you do have a way of expressing sentiment without getting senitmental which makes it all the more moving. I think you captured the essential "cattiness" 
The little buggers do leave paw prints on your heart when they go. 
cheers 
J

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 9th May 2007
Interesting idea... So that's where cats go :) Sweet poem.

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 9th May 2007
Yep, with Jane - you captured the essential cattiness. Perhaps a little sentimental - but sometimes that's allowed. 
 
Little buggers - daintily put. I couldn't type what was said about ours last night. 
 
Phil.

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