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Poetry
For Gorby
By AnnieSeed
09 May 2007
I wrote this in 2000 after being told my favourite cat Gorby was suffering from an inoperable tumour and couldn't be saved.  He fought on though, defied the vet who expected him to be dead in a few weeks. He lived six months after the diagnosis.

We have begun to count off the days like beads
Unsure when the thread will snap
Scattering your precious moments.

Today they told us how you will slowly choke
Your breath cut off from inside
How your heart and lungs are being squeezed aside
And how there's nothing they can do.

So we have begun to count off the days, but I,
I count from the beginning, from the days of kittenhood.
You and your brother Boris scaling the Christmas tree
Swatting the bright baubles, watching them fall and shatter.
Coming home on the bus, you in a basket on my lap,
Widdling on me, in revenge for the visit to the vet.
But we are coming to the end.
The seasons will ring out too few changes
Before your year ends.

So we are counting out each fragile day
Until the light fades and the darkness comes.

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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 9th May 2007
I thought there were some nice bits in this. 'widdling' stuck out as being at odds with the tone of the rest of it for me and I wasn't sure about the ending. The first three lines I liked a lot - good image that. 
 
Elli
HI Annie
Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 10th May 2007
Welcome to the site. I have read all your poems, and I like this one the best. You really portray your anguish, while also recalling the good memories.  
 
I wrote a similar poem when our dog died, but yours is much better.

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