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Poetry
Me?
By vibha
11 May 2007
Some of my Musings about life, about Myself

Me?


Am I the Candle Flame
flickering with the assault of wind?
Or Am I the gust of wind
that in its path teases the candle flame?


Can you see me in the steps
that lead up to the home of Lord?
Or do I exist in the feet,
that tread their way up to divinity?


Can I be felt in the song
that wanders around the tall trees?
Or Am I the lonely lass
who meanders singing songs of love?


Am I the abundant nectar,
that finds its way into a butterfly's mouth?
Or am I the pretty insect,
That sighs in ecstacy with the sweet sip?


Do I travel with the light,
from the lamp of the fast moving train?
Or am I the black darkness,
chased by the train on its nightly tour?


Who am I?
Am I the one whose pen,
has overflown with these words?
Or Am I the one whose eyes
devour each word as they move from top to bottom?

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Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 11th May 2007
I thought the comparisons a good idea to start with with, but I think you pushed the idea a little too far. In the end, this didn't work too well for me - just too repetitive in narrative structure. 
 
Interesting first post though. 
 
Phil.

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