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Green Light
By Snodlander
11 May 2007
Another entry in the 30 second script comp.  It has to be about God and Satan replacing the light at the end of the tunnel with an eco-friendly bulb.

God is on a stepladder, changing the bulb. Satan is holding the ladder steady.

[SATAN]
So why are we changing a perfectly good bulb?

[GOD]
To save energy.

[SATAN]
Yes, but you’re God. Can’t you… [Satan waves his hand in the air. A potted plant appears suspended in the air]… sort of thing and just make more?

[GOD] [testily]
Yes I could just… [waves his hand in imitation of Satan. The potted plant blossoms into a myriad of blooms]… but that’s not the point, is it?

[SATAN]
Why not? What’s the point of being God if you can’t… [waves his hand again. The plant withers and dies]… every now and again?

[GOD]
Because I have to set an example, don’t I. Have you seen what they’ve done to my planet? If I just [waves his hand again. New shoots leap from the remains of the plant] whenever I feel like it, why should they make an effort?

[He climbs down from the ladder.]

There! An energy efficient bulb. Now they’ll be able to walk towards the light in an eco-friendly manner.

[There is a distant roar that grows in volume. A hells angel arrives on a motorcycle that is belching clouds of black smoke. The bike has obviously just been in an horrendous accident. God and Satan cough]

[GOD]
One of yours, I think.

Reviews
Brilliant
Written by stevetroster (1599 comments posted) 11th May 2007
And I say again... 
Brilliant.

Written by Livinginanattic (473 comments posted) 11th May 2007
Since there is a lot of visual stuff here I'd really like to see the finished product. Great stuff, loved the ending. 
 
Cheers.

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 11th May 2007
Liked this, but thought the first one that I read yesterday was much stronger. Did like the general wafting of hands and casual miracle making. 
 
Phil

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 12th May 2007
I didn't get to read the first one, but thought this was a commendable effort. But I've got to say that I wouldn't trust Satan to hold the ladder steady for God -- no way. I wouldn't trust him to hold one steady for me, either.
Best
Written by Asferthecat (859 comments posted) 13th May 2007
I like this the best of the two - perhaps you could add a bit of slapstick with Satan letting the ladder go and it swinging back and forth till God regains control? 

Written by jimbo (83 comments posted) 25th May 2007
Great stuff again. Don't know if I'd agree with Witzl or Asferthecat. God is omniscient, right? He would know well in advance if Satan were trustworthy for the task or if he were going to let go of the ladder. However,He is also omnipotent so He would be more than capable of holding His own ladder steady. Of course, then you wouldn't have a sketch! God does indeed work in mysterious ways. 
Loved it. 
Best wishes 
 
Jim 

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