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Tankas - 4
By jean.day
13 May 2007
I spent yesterday afternoon at the 3 times a year bridge event of our locality - and everyone dresses up. Most of the women are rich and wear expensive clothes. I occasionally benefit from their giving their very good left overs to the local charity shops. But when I wear something really distinctive, I always imagine that the giver will see me wearing it.

I've got my sequence out of order on these, but I don't think it particularly matters.

Bridge Opponent

Short and curly hairs

Have come in a funny place.

Most upon her chin

But also some on her face.

Couldn’t stop looking at her.

 
Successful purchase

Went to a bridge do today

Wearing my silvery top.

Paid two pounds for it

At the local cancer shop.

Wonder whose it was.

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Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 13th May 2007
The first of these made me laugh Jean. Enjoyed them both. Looks like the Tanka is your medium. 
 
Phil.

Written by wattle (117 comments posted) 13th May 2007
I'm with Phil - I laughed too. I'm making you my Tanka owner. – I saw that lady too. The pressure of shopping wisely. ---- Thank you

Written by Lizzy (793 comments posted) 13th May 2007
Enjoyed these too. You're still packing lots into few words. 
Lizzy

Written by Livinginanattic (456 comments posted) 13th May 2007
Hi Jean, I think the rhythm of these was a bit more natural than your earlier efforts although they were good as well. It seems as if you're really mastering this form. 
 
Cheers.
Thanks Phil, Wattle,Lizzy and LIA
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 13th May 2007
I must admit that it is quite fun writing these things. But I have run out of subjects for the time being. I am going to an orthopedic clinic today so I'll keep my eyes open for possible ideas.

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 18th May 2007
Remembers me of a party I once visited. One of the girls I was with started telling:"I bought these clothes in Paris... For about 5 euros"

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