READING ROOM
Great Writing - Home
Read and review others' work
Articles on writing
Advice from the community
COMMUNITY
Talk to others in the forums
Events and Competitions
GW News
ABOUT GREAT WRITING
All About Us
Contact Us
WORK AWAITING REVIEW
GW IS...
Great Writing creative writing community is designed to prompt ideas and provide inspiration and motivation within aspiring and amateur authors. Whatever your topic; from love poetry to Doctor Who or Harry Potter fan fiction, Great Writing's online writing group is where you can make new friends and improve your creative writing.
WHO'S ONLINE
We have 1987 guests online and 7 members online
Poetry
Tankas - 5
By jean.day
14 May 2007
My three hour trip to the orthopaedic clinic wasn't entirely wasted.

Took a bus to the clinic
What will be my fate?
Then walked to the fancy place
Still twenty minutes to wait
Lots of Tanka Time.

Have a funny swollen knee
Pains and makes me limp.
So I’d like a new one please
Know there’s not much chance
Still it doesn’t hurt to see.

Twist it right and twist it left
Did that make it sore?
When I push it just like this
Does it hurt you more?
Think your cartilege is torn.

First a scan to check it out
If we think it fits
Key hole surgery is on
Take away the bits.
Then your pain should disappear.

Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 14th May 2007
Interesting how even this seems to be inspiring!

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 14th May 2007
Uh... With 'this' I meant the operation.

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 14th May 2007
Seem to have a theme of knackered out body parts on the poetry forum tonight. Bad luck Jean - hope it can be sorted out. 
 
You've invented a new form: non-fiction, narrative Tankas. 
 
I like! 
 
Phil.

Written by Lizzy (793 comments posted) 14th May 2007
Still enjoying these Jean. Hope thinking up the Tankas helps you forget the pain for a while. 
Lizzy
Thanks Fledermaus, Phil and Lizzy
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 14th May 2007
I had to exaggerate the pain (my husband's orders) to make sure they took me seriously. Normally I would have said - "Oh, its not bad at all. I can live with it." 
But I really don't want to limp for the rest of my life and it they can sort it, well, hopefully that is what will happen.

   Only registered users can rate and write comments.
   Please login or register.

Powered by AkoComment 2.0!

 Previous item   Next item