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Poetry
Mankind
By charlie
14 May 2007
not too happy with the way we are treating our planet at the moment. and it's so sickening that we turn a blind eye to it.

So amazing the way we place ourselves on the podium
Seeking reactions from few for our noble deeds
As if to say that none shall stand above our glory
Whilst we infect, breed and finally bleed this life away

Never truly satisfied with any of the great achievements
Always trying to better the mistakes you make
Finding new and improved ways to destroy
All of our attempts to reinvent have been forged

Plundering and burning seem to be human routine
Whilst the poor and starving yearn to be seen
You are an architect of violent behavior
Blaming your actions on your so called “savior”

Turning places of beauty into holes in the earth
Ripping the planets skin away to lay your foundations
Congesting the flow of rivers to suite your desires
Ending the cycle with your “purposeful” fires

You preach about superior intellect and the actions that follow
Vomiting words of promise, shelter, support and life
Concentrating only on your pocket’s greedy plight
As the rest of us are left to struggle the humanitarian fight

One day when your golden calf paper withers away
When there are no more innocents for you to slay
When people finally realize that you are no iconic Shepard
When the tether effect is null and void
Will you blame your failures on God as you do your actions?

There will be no salvation for your kind

Paradise was never a destination

Merely a frame of mind

 




 






Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 14th May 2007
Nicely delivered message and very true... Much better to forge paradise right here than to wait for it in the afterlife. 
And agent Smith (in the Matrix) was right: Humanity is a virus...

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3295 comments posted) 14th May 2007
Well, when you put it like that it doesn't sound to cheerful,does it? 
The theme carried in the last 3 lines is the strongest for me and carries more "punch" than some of the angry stuff. 
Not only paradise but God is a state of mind, too? 
I'm a bit confused as you say- 
"As the rest of us are left to struggle the humanitarian fight" 
But the title is Mankind which I took to mean we were all going to hell in a hand basket. Aren't we all mankind together? Perhaps It's just me 
cheers 


Written by Phil (6635 comments posted) 14th May 2007
Thought the end of this powerful and effective, but with BBS when she says (I think) she isn't sure about the specific subject of this. 
 
Phil.

Written by charlie (6 comments posted) 14th May 2007
the meaning of the line "... humanitarian fight" points to the people who try to make the world a better place against all odds. sometimes its a bit hard to exclude the rage felt for people who plunder forth. i know this poem is a rather angry one but, if so many people ignore such an important thing you tend to start shouting after a while.

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