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Telegraph Poles
By gutterkitty
17 May 2007
I like the ache
of missing you;
the way it softens my bones,
leaves me warm and restless.
Cupping your voice on the telephone
in my hands,
pressing your smile to my cheek
like a cool cloth on a summer day.

My fingers entwined
in the curled cord,
the line that ties me to you,
spans miles of telegraph poles
holding hands.
The electricity beneath my skin,
crackling at the receiver,
at the damp cheek where I held your lips.

Reviews
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Written by patterjack (1328 comments posted) 17th May 2007
I really like this one ! 
 
Simple extended imagery that makes its point strongly 
 
patterjack
very nice
Written by fellpony (1656 comments posted) 17th May 2007
very effective. I like the idea of telegraph poles holding hands. 
 
Enjoyed. 
 
FP
Telegraph Poles
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 17th May 2007
This is a lovely emotive work. I think you must know love in its deepest form to be able to write about being apart from someone in such a beautiful way. 
Cliff

Written by Livinginanattic (466 comments posted) 17th May 2007
A lovely poem and very vivid. I enjoyed the imagery. 
 
Cheers.

Written by AnnieSeed (128 comments posted) 17th May 2007
Well done, this really hits the spot. I agree with all that's said above and I thought the imagery worked very well.

Written by Lizzy (822 comments posted) 17th May 2007
With everyone else, thought this was lovely. 
lizzy

Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 17th May 2007
With all of the above, plus: 
 
My fingers entwined 
in the curled cord, 
 
gave physical context to this. Almost reaching down the line. 
 
Genuine feeling shines through. 
 
Phil. 
 
thanks everyone!
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 18th May 2007
Glad you liked it. Been having a bit of trouble with the writing lately so your comments are really encouraging :)

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 18th May 2007
Yep - some lovely simple yet really effective imagery. A good one. 
 
Elli

Written by goingtothedogs (58 comments posted) 22nd May 2007
Yep, loved it too. We've all been there havn't we. 
 
My partner and I have a running joke that our mobile phone answering services seem to have an on-going affair talking to each other leaving us to just get on with our lives

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 23rd May 2007
Thanks for your comment goingtothedogs, glad you enjoyed it. I wonder how these answering machines feel about being left to do all the hard work..?

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