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By proveyouexist
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18 May 2007 |
I promise you a better life, I promise you life after death, I promise you something to look forward to.
Even though we have never met, you trust me.
You will be following in my shadow for your entire life.
I am what you dream about, slave for, live for, all for us to hopefully convene one day.
Yet we will never cross paths.
I feed off of your ignorance, off your negligence.
Until the day you are not breathing on your own.
You will realize that I am your certain death and you can’t fucking stand me.
I am the future.
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Written by stevetroster (1588 comments posted) 18th May 2007 | 'proveyouexist'
I trust that you will eventually get God out of your system.
You seem to be devoting a lot of your time to something that doesn't exist for you. |
Written by proveyouexist (6 comments posted) 18th May 2007 | | The subject this poem is composed around has nothing to with a god; it has to do with the future in general. The first person narrative is referring to the future as a general idea. |
Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 18th May 2007 | Have it your way - but for me it reads better if it is about god. Half riddle, half poem. Not sure it's poetry, but I like it.
Phil. |
Written by goingtothedogs (58 comments posted) 22nd May 2007 | Personally I think that concentrating on life before death would make the world a better place for more people.
You might think about that.
Good wordage, but I think the theme is getting a bit carried away with itself... |
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