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REM
By proveyouexist
18 May 2007
Oh, how I slip into unconsciousness is so beautiful.
Without warning, without premeditations, I start to lose the sensation in my fingertips.
I fall into a place where nothing makes any sense but everything I see feels very right.
I break into a cold sweat, I scream at illusions, and I fear the unreal.
I feel as if I can’t move, I can’t think for myself.
I become obsessed with the fake dialogue that is projected at me.
I am observing images flash before my eyes and then disappear in seconds.
I almost feel as if I am being controlled, almost proselytized…



…And then I turn off the television.

 

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Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 18th May 2007
LOL. Without the end it would have been an interseting one already, but I liked that last twist. :grin

Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 19th May 2007
Is there a word missing, or a wrong word? 
 
"I am observing images flash before my eyes and then disappear in seconds" 
 
Best wishes 
Steve. 

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