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Two soldiers
By Fledermaus
18 May 2007
Rome and China did know of eachother's existence, but I doubt if they ever realized how great the other empire was...

The soldier stood on top of the watchtower and looked at the endless forest in front of him. Out there was the wilderness, the land of the Germans and the Celts. The limes stretched all the way from the Western Sea to the Danube. It must have been the largest wall mankind had ever seen.
Here he stood, the proud Roman, guarding the borders of the world's mightiest empire. Soldiers before him had conquered all these lands. Gaul, Carthage, Egypt, Greece, Britannia... Kingdoms and tribelands had fallen before the children of the she-wolf. Fifty million people bowed before the divine caesar.
He looked to the east and wondered. Could there be another such empire? He had heard of the Scythes and the Parthes, but they were only savage nomads. No, Rome was unique...

Far beyond the lands of those tribes, and those of people the Roman had never heard of, a soldier stood upon a watchtower and looked down at the barren plains. Over there was naugh but wilderness, the home of the Mongols and the Xiongnu. The Great wall stretched all the way from the eastern sea to the desert. It must have been the largest wall mankind had ever built.
Here he stood, the proud Han, guarding the borders of the world's mightiest empire. Soldiers before him had conquered the entire civilized world. Han, Wei, Chu, Yan, Zhao, Qi... All nations were united by the children of the dragon. Fifty million people were subject of the Son of Heaven.
He looked west and wondered. Could there be an empire like this anywhere else? He had heard of the Viets and the Indians, but they were not as powerful. No, the Middle Kingdom was unique...

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HI Fledermaus
Written by jean.day (2264 comments posted) 18th May 2007
Glad to have you back again. 
 
I didn't know the Romans had a wall similar to the Chinese wall. I knew they made one across the top of England, of course, but hadn't realised they blocked off all their territory. 
 
What sort of date are you putting on this? When did the ships start going to China for trade?

Written by Lizzy (790 comments posted) 19th May 2007
This was well written and I thought its circularity was particularly effective and telling. 
Lizzy

Written by Fledermaus (3246 comments posted) 19th May 2007
Thanks Jean and Lizzy, 
Jean: The limes was by far not as huge as the Great Wall of China (except maybe for Hadrian's wall), but I imagine that to the average person living in Europe at that time it must have been impressive. The part in Germany was mainly made out of wood: one long palisade lined with forts. I supose so little of it is left because it was made out of wood. 
This story is set in the time of imperial Rome and Han China. Probably the 2nd century AD. 
 
Lizzy: Thanks :) The paralels between the two empires fascinated me.

Written by Phil (6675 comments posted) 19th May 2007
Interesting and well writeen stuff Fledermaus. Liked the way this was mirrored. 
Phil.

Written by anorwegianwood (278 comments posted) 19th May 2007
This is a very nicely set-up piece. An interesting perspective and an interesting read. 
 
~Claire

Written by Fledermaus (3246 comments posted) 20th May 2007
Thanks phil and Claire, 
Isn't it strange that two countries so far apart could have been so similar?

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