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Sybil in the Stacks
By patterjack
19 May 2007
Who knows the secrets of those who guard our knowledge?

Sybil  in  the  Stacks

She  sits   behind  the  desk,  with  fluorescent  lights
glinting  on  her  heavy spectacles. 
Her hair  ,  meticulously   pinned    back  in a bun
has  its  own  shine ;  and  her clear  pale    skin ,
with no  cosmetics   ,  not  even  an  eyebrow  plucked  or   pencilled in
has  its  own  translucent glow .
No  transcendent  beauty  in  herself  ,  she  makes  the   most  
of  a  sensuous  bottom  lip  ,  lightly coloured pink 
from  biting with white  and  even  teeth  as  she ponders
a  problem  someone  has  left  her  to  be  solved .

Ah  !   See there  !   As  if  to  free  her  mind 
she  loosens some  wisps   of  hair  from  their   confinement
and  suddenly  the  problem  is  no   longer  hers ,   but  mine !
As  she rises   from her  high  backed   office  chair
the library  has become a  Sibyl's  cave 
and  I  no  longer  see the  modern  girl   in  neat  grey  suit
but  a  nubile  priestess swaying  in the  drug  filled  smoke,
her white  limbs  flashing  through  a  flimsy   gown.

I  am  distracted  from  the  abstract contemplation
of the  literature ,   philosophy   and  art  I could find  here
all  vaulted  in  these   dark  and  musty  stacks ,
but  bring  a  different  questing  mind   to  bear
on  carnal  matters , beauty  of  the  fleshly  kind .

Her  mind  is with  the  gods  ,  her  body  here   by  me  .

I  shall  ask  no questions  of  her.



Reviews

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 19th May 2007
I may have to show this to my boss. He has a thing about librarians and music teachers being in need of brown paper bags. 
 
On second reading, I got a lot more from this. The first stanza is very visual, almost like a film director's notes for a close up - shot in colour, but almost monotone. 
 
The second stanza explodes into life and engages much more than the visual. 
 
It's wonderful when we stumble upon beauty of any kind. 
 
Enjoyed very much. 
 
Phil. 
 

Written by AnnieSeed (128 comments posted) 19th May 2007
Brilliant, Patterjack - you really bring her to life. Every word perfectly chosen.
Another of your "dirty old man" series
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 20th May 2007
Very sensuous, which is what you do best. Excellent in every way. 
 
At first I read "Sybil in slacks" and thought that it may be about Basil Fawlty's Wife in "Farty Towels", I mean "Fawlty Towers" :p  
 
Oli
Thanks all !
Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 20th May 2007
... and Oli , javing just read your idecnt proposals to Elli , I can ask -- Who are YOU to call anyone a dirty old man !!! ?  
 
PS -- I do work at it , I admit , but the thought and the deed are discrete , though not discreet 
 
patterjack
Sybil
Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 20th May 2007
Liked this a lot. I wonder if women who were actually christened Sybil ever realised how ancient a mantle they were being given? I haven't met one who survived as long as the Cumaean lady ... I assume your vision was of the Delphic variant!  
 
Anyone seen '300'?
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 20th May 2007
The blood-spattered movie about the best race in classical history? 
 
Your description of the sybil is similar to the portrayal in that film. I love 'her white limbs flashing' - makes me proud to be pale! 
 
nicely done 
 
clo
Wonderful image
Written by mmSeason (32 comments posted) 22nd May 2007
and i'll give more indepth critique by email. 
mand
HI Brian
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 24th April 2008
I saw this as Pick of the Week - and found it a very worthy winner. You do have such a flare with words.  
 
I enjoyed it very much.

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 27th April 2008
Libraries are potentially erotic places. The imposed silence, the restraint, and everyone seemingly concerned with matters of the mind. Even the slightest glance becomes charged with meaning. I enjoyed this piece despite my initial ignorance of the classical reference. 
Who chooses the pick of the week?
Who chooses the pick of the week?
Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 27th April 2008
Admins: Ed, nascent or me. We like to have people nudge us about any new piece that's worthy of POTW though, as sometimes we don't read everything that's posted every single day :grin :grin :grin

Written by mia_ms_kim (1017 comments posted) 27th April 2008
Women's magazines and the media are dominated often by the "obvious" women, in my opinion, with an exhausting emphasis on the outer. They often leave very little to imagination. I'm so glad that there are minds that zoom in on those who doesn't advertise themselves, eg. a librarian is a good example, and sense the womanly mystery of those women. I find this piece fascinating for that reason, beyond just how well-written it is. 
 
Mia :)
Sybil
Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 13th May 2008
Aren't brains the most attractive part? A good looking woman without intellect isn't likely to hold my attention very long.  
A bimbo in a short skirt and high heels may be attractive for an instant, yet a geek girl with worn jeans and sneakers might cause much longer infatuations if she manages to blow me away with her smartness. 
Imagine your librarian actually having all that knowledge not just around her on the shelves, but inside her. Combined with her quiet and mysterious attitude, wouldn't that make her one of the best people to spent a night with?

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