Goodness me ! -- fourteen lines mostly pentametrical but not a sonnet ! A fun piece.
Khatchachurian in the Kitchen with Kebabs
The notes from the Khatchachurian concerto
glint through the kitchen reflecting from the steel
as the cleaver descends , slicing the lamb for kebabs .
Flesh peels from bone and fat is flayed from flesh.
The arhythmic beat of the music sets the style
that controls the movement of the heavy blade:
swift and sure through the muscle thick and pink
slower and slower when stripping the silver skin
that stretches from shank to thigh along each segment.
Varying colours and textures in music and meat
make cubic patterns under the kitchen light.
What could have been mechanical becomes a making --
Art and the mundane combine here in their action
bringing together food for body and spirit .
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Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 19th May 2007 |
Enjoyable piece with some interesting images.
Typo: arhythmic - Arrhythmic |
Not so
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 19th May 2007 |
Neither a misspelling nor a typographical error .
Deliberately used to avoid the pathological.
patterjack |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 20th May 2007 |
Mmmm. Sow your alowed two doo anyfing yew lyke then in poitry are ewe?
I do it to encourage the pathos. |
Written by Talisker (1336 comments posted) 20th May 2007 |
Meaty piece, with a sort of culinary violence to it - musical butchery - I like it.
Not for the vegetarian though 
Oli |
spelin
Written by fellpony (1749 comments posted) 20th May 2007 |
First of all - patterjack - nice mix of the fleshly and the spiritual!
Second - Dear Stevetroster - a-rhythmic means without rhythm. A meaning without, rhythmic meaning - er, rhythmic.
Arrhythmia is a clinical condition (palpitations), an abnormal heart rhythm.
OK, maybe patterjack could have put a hyphen in to make that clearer, and since he doesn't tell us which Katchaturian piece he means I can't comment on whether it is a-rhythmic or not (possibly syncopated - that's a posh way saying pissed on a pub crawl: an irregular movement from bar to bar).
I would not say you are allowed to do anything you like just because it is poetry.
Eye halve a spelling chequer
It came with my pea sea
It plainly marques four my revue
Miss steaks eye kin knot sea.
Eye strike a quay and type a word
And weight four it two say
Weather eye am wrong oar write
It shows me strait a weigh.
Wen ever a mist ache is maid
It nose bee fore two long
And eye can put the error rite
Its rear lee ever wrong.
Eye've run this poem threw it
I'm shore your pleased two no
Its letter perfect in it's weigh
My chequer tolled me sew.
(Sauce unknown)
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Dear pony...
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 20th May 2007 |
I stand corrected, but surely PJ could have answered my question without your aid.
Ah, but then where would GW be without the little M.A.S's?
Probably a much better place! |
Yes indeed
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 20th May 2007 |
I could have answered it -- but antipodean time and family commitments got in the way and there is no need to now. Discussion closed as far as I am concerned . I agree with Fellpony's sentiment ( and my thanks to her ) :
I would not say you are allowed to do anything you like just because it is poetry.
Much the same applies to reviews : as for instance one should check references about last trumps before commenting on patterjack moments ( NB no capital as the penname is itself a quote )
patterjack
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 21st May 2007 |
Firstly; i'ts a shame when reviews sink to pedantic point scoring to display your cleverness. It can come back bite you on the bum.
The only thing I know by Khatchachurian is the Sabre Dance and if he was cutting meat in time to that it end up as dog food.Some wild and bloody images here set against the backdrop of classical music, bringing it all to a neat theme. I like the thought that we are all a mixture of the visceral and the spiritual, it shouldn't be ignored
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Written by mmSeason (32 comments posted) 26th May 2007 |
Scary images, very visceral (again), Brian, and it says just how music (art, generally) can imbue our activities.
I love your definition, fellpony: "syncopated - that's a posh way saying pissed on a pub crawl: an irregular movement from bar to bar)." And thanx for "Eye halve a spelling chequer" which i always think of when i need it but never have to hand - and will now.
Poor sentence construction but if i stop to display my cleverness with a pedantic point score, i won't get my feedback typed at all.
mand |
Written by man_in_the_box (13 comments posted) 30th October 2007 |
| Really nice, visceral feel to this. And I know you said discussion closed, but what the hell is this? I am a firm believer that actually, one can do whatever they like "just because its poetry". Be free, express whatever you want. I've recieved several comments which weren't helpful at all, merely telling me that my work isn't poetry. Admittedly more from a structural point of view, but the self-indulgence of certain members (none who have commented here) to suggest that theirs is the one true definition of poetry? Unbelievable... |
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