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A Love Story
By CliffBowes
20 May 2007
True love really needs no introduction...

A LOVE STORY


It was the 2nd June 1943 and Maureen Angela Needham was in love. Not actually in
love in the normally accepted meaning of the words, but consumed by love, blinded by love, could not think coherently of anything other than the object of her love, one Matthew James Fraser.
Whilst soaking in the bath that afternoon Maureen had made a decision; she was going to confess her love to Matthew. She knew that the romance would not blossom unless she told him of her feelings and found out if he had similar feelings towards her. Perhaps she would discuss marriage, or at least sow the seeds within his mind.


 Today was Maureen's birthday; a few close friends were coming round to help her
celebrate it by sharing a small buffet. In these days of ration books and austerity it had to be small. Maureen was thinking that the whole evening was a charade, a sham. The only guest she wanted to be with was Matthew.


As she gently eased herself into her pure white underwear, white stockings and palest of pink cotton dress a thought flashed into her mind. "If I 'phone all the guests except him and tell them that the party is off, I will be able to spend the evening alone with Him." She dismissed this idea almost as soon as it had formed in her mind. She knew that there would be lots of time in the future when they would be together.
Her furtive glances at the clock were becoming more frequent now, as the magic hour approached. She couldn't relax, all the time brushing imaginary hair from her eyes and smoothing the front of her already immaculate dress.


Each ring on the doorbell, as the guests arrived, brought a flush to Maureen's already pink cheeks. A quick check revealed that all were present except one, the only one that mattered, the most important person in her life.

"Perhaps he's had an accident," she thought, "taken ill, gone out with someone else,
decided he doesn't like me after all, or maybe died." all these thoughts raced through Maureen's over active mind prior to their being cast aside by the sound of the door-bell.

She walked the length of the hall in a dream. Slowly she opened the front door to
reveal him, Matthew, standing there. She was so pleased to see that he had worn his uniform for the occasion. He smiled his lop-sided, sheepish smile as he handed her an inexpertly wrapped gift and a card. Maureen could hardly speak; she stammered a hasty"thank you" and removed the paper from the present. "Oh Mathew, it's just what I wanted," she said when she saw the latest Angela Brazil book nestling in its gift wrapping. She then opened the card and saw the Teddies, golliwogs and flowers tumbling all around the large number eleven on the front. She looked inside and read the handwritten message with its accompanying ink-blots :-


HAPPY BURTHDAY MOREEN. WITH LUV FROM MATTHEW. X X.

 

She thought that she would faint with ecstasy when she leant over, touched the collar of his Boys Brigade uniform and claimed her two kisses.

 

 

 

 


Reviews
Never too young
Written by Diplomat (28 comments posted) 20th May 2007
Cliff, a gentle story that proves, if proof were needed, that you are never too young nor too old to be smitten. 
A lovely tale with just the right touch of humour in the twist at tale's end.

Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 20th May 2007
A few formatting issues made it a slightly strange read. 
 
Mathew, becomes Matthew, becomes Mathew. 
 
Had a problem with this section as I found it to be a bit messy, possibly due to missing punctuation.  
"As she gently eased herself into her pure white underwear, white stockings and palest of pink cotton dress a thought flashed into her mind." 
 
Punctuation needs looking at in several areas. 
 
Best wishes 
Steve.

Written by Janie (265 comments posted) 20th May 2007
hi cliff, what a charming story with a twist i didn't expect. i thought you did a good job of building up her anticipation and excitement. 
 
i have a couple issues since this is set in the early 40's...the mention of the phone...not many ordinary folk had phones in those days, mainly the rich had them and i thought it highly unlikely that all the guests would have phones too...unless they were all rich...doorbells too, only big houses had those i think... most had knockers...so if they are rich you need to show sticklers for historical detail like me... :grin have a maid answer the door or describe the house more..no tin bath but a bathroom no less etc. 
 
also when matthew arrived i still pictured him on the doorstep when she opened the gift, there was no mention of him stepping inside or entering the parlour...i can't imagine her making him stand on the doorstep while she opened it....very picky and minor points i know but i enjoyed the story. 
Sweet
Written by Asferthecat (834 comments posted) 20th May 2007
A sweet story with an unexpected ending. You could have even made her six years old and it would still ring true. Children are extraordinarily romantic.
HI Cliff
Written by jean.day (2264 comments posted) 21st May 2007
I too was thinking this was about a grown woman right until the end - and had trouble with the white stockings. I couldn't think that in war times white nylons would have been available - or desireable - so was rather relieved when it was white ankle socks. 
 
I wonder what sort of books Angela Brazil wrote. Never heard the name before.  
 
I also appreciated you talking about when he was late, she imagined every sort of thing being wrong with him. I still have that problem when my husband is later than he said and I don't know why.

Written by Snodlander (501 comments posted) 21st May 2007
Liked it. Saw the end just too late, though thought it was going to be his school uniform rather than his BB uniform. 
 
I too thought phones and stockings were at odds with war-time Britain. Bobby socks would be equally acceptable for children and young women. 
 
I liked the way the fears built, as though being ill or in an accident were lesser fears to him choosing not to come or, horror of horrors, liking someone else.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 21st May 2007
I enjoyed this and thought it worked well too, though I echo Steve's comments about the punctuation, as I am a Stickler. (Capital letter intentional.)  
 
I've got to agree with previous comments about the telephone and stockings. Even in the States it was unusual to have these during and immediately after the War. I'd stick with plain old socks, and change the part about the phone.

Written by Lizzy (790 comments posted) 22nd May 2007
Agree with previous comments, thought it was a good read and it built up well to the surprise end. Thought you got her feelings right. 
 
Had heard of Angela Brazil but couldn't think who she was. Looked her up, she wrote stories for girls early 20th century. First to write non instructional but 'fun' stories. 
 
Enjoyed your story. 
Lizzy

Written by Phil (6675 comments posted) 26th May 2007
An enjoyable story. Notwithstanding some historical details (on which I can't comment as I don't know enough) this worked really well. The ending was well disguised. Unusual comment for me, perhaps a reflection of how much I liked it, I thought this could have been fleshed out a little more. 
 
From one romantic soul to another - well done. 
 
Phil.

Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 1st June 2007
Didn't see it coming until the very moment when the card was opened. So, a job well done. It flowed well for me, liked the way you have captured the girl's feelings and the way she starts imagining things. Great. 
 
Regards, 
TT

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