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imagine

By donna73

21 May 2007

once the first step of braking away i felt so safe, and kids wasn't walking on egg shells whwt was allready broken. FREE AS A BIRD

Imagine your heart is made of silk,

Imagine the smell of stale milk.

You put the milk in the bin,

Tie your heart back up with string.

The silk is so frayed, what else can you use,

Do they not realise it's mental abuse?

Head games, pillow talk, they think you've forgot!

You give them all in return for what?

Why do they reject the love that we give?

Do they not realise we fight ourselves to forgive?

While your sat at home thinking things through,

You know yourself whats best to do.

When it's everyday, your thinking the same,

It becomes an heartache, not a game.

Is it all worth the pain that your in?

As the love you are giving is like stale milk thrown in the bin!

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Review of Imagine.
Written by Blackout (2 comments posted) 21st May 2007

I personally enjoyed this poem thoroughly. At the start to me the stale milk metaphor seemed a bit out of place, threw me off ever so slightly, however it makes perfect sense upon the last line. I usually struggle to follow the rhythm to other peoples poems quite a bit, probably something to do with the way I read, but I found my mind briskly danced through this one.

The subject itself is obviously a dark one and well thought out, making sense entirely, I believe anyway. I enjoyed it and I wouldn't be surprised if some people connected with it.

One thing I did notice though, About halfway through we was used as well as you and your, as if signifying authors involvement, perhaps trying to create a connection between author and reader or to show a feeling of understanding.

Why do they reject the love that we give?

Do they not realise we fight ourselves to forgive?

You then switch back to the use of you and your, forsaking the connection made earlier, I don't know whether this was intentional, or just slip of the wording.

Hope review isn't taken badly.

Blackout.

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