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Live Forever
By Blackout
22 May 2007
My first attempt at a submission, I allowed a friend of mine to choose one of my poems from a selection. This was chosen. Hope its Liked :)

 
I want to go down in a blaze of glory,

Want to live my life in a golden kingdom,

Want to see the world through more then two eyes,

And feel the touch of your skin tonight.



I want to relive each day over,

Want to follow that shooting star,

Want to to fill 100 hollow hearts,

And see the beauty in your eyes tonight.



I want to climb up the highest mountain,

Want to swim within every sea,

Want to run the longest running track,

And smell your flowing hair tonight.



I want to fly amongst all the clouds,

Want to dive off the tallest tower,

Want to dance every glorious dance,

And taste your lips against mine tonight.



I want to live throughout forever,

With each day lived like its the last,

With a spirit of hope never dyeing,

As I'll know, your always within my grasp.



And if I can't have any of that,

If I can't fly, or see, or dive, or live a ever lasting Life,

Then let me have this one thing,

Let me feel the touch of your skin tonight.

Reviews

Written by donna73 (6 comments posted) 21st May 2007
hi there 
 
yer i liked that, nice one :)

Written by Toad (100 comments posted) 22nd May 2007
feeling the touch of skin, following shooting stars... don't settle for such terms. I think you need to find ways to express those things that say something new, something unique to your experience. "taste your lips" just isn't striking.  
It's a lovely poem, but dig deeper! don't settle for expressing emotions and desires at face value.

Written by goingtothedogs (58 comments posted) 22nd May 2007
Lovely....

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