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Sleeping Alone
By goingtothedogs
22 May 2007
My first post into this site....

We've all had those lonely nights. Perhaps some of you out there might recognize this.

I'd love some feedback.

Sleeping Alone

I lie abed alone at night and see with only dreaming eye
Through panes, the moon casts silver trace....
The shadows form my lover’s face
Beside me now my lover lies

With tender word and warm caress, my love and I make song
Our spirits, souls and bodies twine
I reach to touch this lover mine,
To whom my heart belongs

Outside the moon is bright and clear; a velvet night and deep.
Though beside me empty sheets I find
A warm embrace around me twines,
And my love and I shall sleep.

Reviews

Written by AnnieSeed (128 comments posted) 22nd May 2007
I like this poem - the imagery is beautiful and I especially like "a velvet night and deep". I find it so hard to describe a really beautiful moonlit night, especially when the moon in question is huge, soft and golden. There's nothing like it.  
 
Well done.

Written by Pythagoras (11 comments posted) 22nd May 2007
This is a lovely poem, although I don't feel loneliness when I read it, rather I can see the beauty of the night through the window.Beatiful!!

Written by goingtothedogs (58 comments posted) 23rd May 2007
Glad you both liked it. 
 
Pythagoras... you're quite right of course. I put it badly didn't I. Loneliness is the wrong word. Wistfulness perhaps.....

Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 25th May 2007
Really enjoyed the pulse of this. With the above too. You put across a strong feeling here - wistful is better than lonely. Good stuff. 
 
Phil 

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