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Tattooed Vampire
By Talisker
23 May 2007
Cherchez la femme

I saw you in a daguerreotype.


Timeless beauty, mercury vaporised,

a butterfly caught.


Then, a wild Walpurgis night,

when I, enclosed in velvet folds,

to trade my soul for six seconds,

was done and undone.


Your sorcery remains upon me.

Poison in my bloodstream,

poison in my mind.


I wanted redemption,

I settled for life.


Oli 23/05/07

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Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 23rd May 2007
... to deal with , vampires . 
 
Chercher , cherchez ? and tattooed ? Spelling ? 
 
Interesting concept but more concentrated in thought than I can follow completely. 
 
patterjack
Excellent!
Written by Talisker (1336 comments posted) 23rd May 2007
Hey Brian! 
 
Most of your stuff is more "concentrated in thought" than I can deal with. So, revenge is mine! 
 
Oli

Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 24th May 2007
I don't know if I'm qualified to comment on your work, but here goes. 
I liked this very much, and I liked the antiquated feel that you gave to the piece with the use of words like daguerreotype. 
I assume that the man/woman is not a real vampire (can you photograph a vampire?), but that he/she 'infected' the voyeur by way of his/her timeless beauty. 
To repeat myself, I liked this very much, and it inspired me (for what it's worth!). 
Best wishes 
Steve.

Written by Phil (6998 comments posted) 25th May 2007
Hi Oli. I like the rhythm of this, both in language and context/story. Have to confess - like PJ, not got a complete handle on this - ideas keep circling and changing. Possibly not a bad thing. 
 
Phil.

Written by Pythagoras (11 comments posted) 26th May 2007
I read this after The Harrisons which was so good and so visual. I found this hard to follow - sorry, liked the other one much better. 
 
Jan

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