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Making An Impression
By Talisker
24 May 2007
Claude Oscar Monet's later works were considered to be "more abstract" - but some bright spark recently suggested the it was merely the deterioration of the old fellow's eyesight... 

I stumbled into Claude the other day,

he couldn’t see that I was in the way.

He looked me in the pixelated face,

as though I interloped in time and space,

and said my name is Monet, I declare,

what right have you to be here en plein air?


Recovering my poise, I asked with tact,

good sir do you see me in the abstract?

Through cataracts do I appear quite blurry?

Or were you merely leaving in a hurry?

He looked me up and down, then with disdain,

as though the mere suggestion caused him pain,

he smudged before my eyes, then disappeared,

the answer must have been as I had feared.

Oli 24/05/07

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Written by AnnieSeed (128 comments posted) 24th May 2007
This is really clever, Oli. It scans perfectly and is very witty. I like it a lot - it would be good to see more like it.

Written by goingtothedogs (58 comments posted) 24th May 2007
Didn't "get it" at first 'cos I'm a bit of a philistine where "art" is concerned. 
 
Once I got it, went back, read it again and liked it. 
 
Of course, that's always the problem if you're dealing with "niche knowledge".......

Written by Lizzy (793 comments posted) 25th May 2007
I thought that this was clever too. 
Maybe try writing one about Van Gogh whose mental problems, I think, made him paint in the way he did. 
Lizzy

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 25th May 2007
I really liked this, Oli -- it works in every possible way. Funny, too. 
 
They say that Monet went back to some of his later paintings after his cataract surgery and readjusted the colors... 

Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 25th May 2007
enjoyed this Oli - interesting twist, having Claude disappear as though his failing sight includes his perception of himself.

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 25th May 2007
Enjoyed this Oli. Interesting you should use the word pixelated. Ever since digital photography came along, I've always thought of Monet's work as blurry, big pixels. 
 
Clever and entertaining. 
 
Phil.

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