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By madeupname
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25 May 2007 |
This is my first poem and my first time on this site. I wrote this when I lived in another country and was fed up trying to explain myself and apparently making a pig's ear of it.
Psalm 139
Understand me Lord
As no one else can
Not my very mind
Nor any wiser man
I am so far from home
And I struggle to be
The person I know
Only you see
Disappointment rings out
As I try to pretend
I can do it alone
I don’t need a friend
I have buried my dreams
So many hopes die
The passion’s grown cold
With the questioning why
So help me to find
A way through this land
I’m crying out
For just a touch from the hand
That created me…
understand me Lord
and help me to be
the person I know
Only you see
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Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 25th May 2007 | More prayer than poem. Personally, you (we/me) are what we make ourselves to be.
Phil. |
Written by mmSeason (32 comments posted) 26th May 2007 | Your very first poem? Congratulations on going public which takes courage. And it rhymes! and more or less scans! which i rarely achieve. Heartfelt obviously and i don't see why a prayer can't be a poem too. But i do think a poem is strengthened by saying more or different from just stating (however poetically) how you feel; that's advanced poem-mongering though.
I remember, when living abroad, a profound urge to scream at a doctor's receptionist, "If you really want to know what i'm explaining, go away and learn English and then i'll tell you!" A particular kind of exhaustion on some days, reaching saturation. I hope your stay was positive overall.
mand | Psalm 139
Written by Pythagoras (11 comments posted) 26th May 2007 | Even though we know we can't do it on our own, we can/always forget to ask for the strength that God will give us to cope in the situation he has put us in.
Well done, keep writing.
Jan |
Written by madeupname (18 comments posted) 29th May 2007 | Defo think poems and prayers can be one and the same. Thanks for comments, my stay was full of lots of experiences and that cant be a bad thing!
Do |
Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 6th July 2007 | | I was away when you posted this poem, but I am glad to read it now. A prayer can be a poem - of course it can. The Psalms of David are very poetic, and I often wonder how a simple shepherd boy could write so eloquently. So continue, because if a shepherd boy could do it, so can you. I have found that, being a Christian, when I have turned to God in prayer, doors open. It has never failed for me. Things have happened which are absolutely unexplainable, and I have had miracles happen in my lifetime that are unexplainable to doctors. Not only to me, but to my father and others I know. I could write a book. I would find it impossible to think that we are not a part of a terrific force - which I call "God".. |
Written by madeupname (18 comments posted) 10th July 2007 | | Thanks Josie I have had a million small and fantastic miracles when I have prayed like this that it utterly amazes me God has such an interest, especially in the small details. Hope He continues to amaze you too! |
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