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Reserve (revised)
Written by fellpony
26 May 2007
Stage fright in the auction ring

Such friendly calves they were, with trusting charm
and gentle eyes. Among the rough half-breds,
their silky coated shapely bodies breathed
black-and-white pedigreed assurance.
Right from the outset they were uncrowned queens.
I didn’t want to sell them.

They were much too fine
for our herd, and we never meant to milk.
Our neighbour, with a well bred dairy herd,
admired the growing beauties who could bring
class to his milking parlour; but canny
farmers waste no cash on bids at home.

He watched them go to auction. “Go and try!
I won't bid, but you needn't sell
if no-one bids your set reserve;
I'll meet your price.”

They dodged about the ring with lowered head,
confused as I. The bidding stopped. And when
I should have said, “No,”
–  only one word, “No,”
I stood there dumb. And with the word unsaid
the auction hammer cracked on my reserve.

Our neighbour, and my husband, didn’t salt
the wound. Accepting I had lost my nerve,
they both shrugged. But I knew it was my fault.

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Written by Phil (6688 comments posted) 26th May 2007
Cows can be beautiful creatures, especially young ones. Your admiration of them and connection to them shines through with a kind of regretful sadness. 
 
Enjoyed this a lot. 
 
The ending suggests that they were perhaps sold for slaughter, not dairy. Or is that my poetic and farming ignorance coming through? 
 
A series of farming poems collected together could work very well. 
 
Phil.

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