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| By Asferthecat | ||||||||||||||
| 27 May 2007 | ||||||||||||||
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I looked up haibun and discovered it was a mixture of prose and haiku. I thought I would give it a try and used it to redo a discarded story. I certainly prefer the story this way. Does it work for you? Fall forwards then stop Gravity will push on you And raise you upwards. The Great Om knew how to levitate but he had never managed to do it. Most of his acolytes were content to bounce in the lotus position in the levitation chamber. The pleasurable compression of their genitals made them feel as if they were flying but although the Great Om assured them that they were defying gravity, in truth they were not. Fall forwards then stop Gravity will push on you And raise you upwards. Today was an important day. The temple’s main sponsor was visiting with his mother – a formidable woman who was threatening to disinherit her credulous son. She was sitting in the visitor’s gallery, an expression of sneering disapproval on her face as she watched the acolytes below her. The Great Om leant forwards then threw caution to the winds and allowed himself to topple. He was about to fall flat on his face when suddenly he stopped and started to rise in the air. Fall forwards then stop Gravity will push on you And raise you upwards. He looked down and saw the astounded faces of his acolytes turned upwards to stare at him. He adjusted his robes to hide his underwear and continued to rise. He was on level with his sponsor’s mother. She stared at him open-mouthed as he gave her a sad, wise, forgiving smile. He hit the ceiling. A gentle breeze bumped him along towards the open skylight. Frantically he tried to reverse the levitation process but he could not. The last his devoted acolytes saw of him was a pair of kicking feet. Then he was gone. Fall forwards then stop Gravity will push on you And raise you upwards.
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