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By pualdo
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27 May 2007 |
this is just me playing with words, but I like this poem. I'm under the warped floorboards,
in the rickety bed and breakfast,
with a pack of red eyed wolves
prowling the streets outside
with the remains of children
soggy in their mouths.
i hide in excited silence,
staring at the pile of spiders
that writhes in front of me
and I hope not to be found. |
CRAP!!!!!
Written by pualdo (10 comments posted) 27th May 2007 | | could somebody PLEASE tell me how to make a new paragraph on this site? I'M FLABBERGASTED!!! |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 27th May 2007 | Why? It looks great the way it is!
Go to 'view my existing work' and tab it down.
It's best to post first as 'just me', and then to go back in to 'view' to tweek it before revealing to all.
Does that make sense?
Best wishes
Steve.
P.S. love this bit: a pack of red eyed wolves prowling the streets outside with the remains of children soggy in their mouths. |
Written by Phil (6688 comments posted) 27th May 2007 | Only guessing, but is this something like what you were after?
I'm under the warped floorboards,
in the rickety bed and breakfast,
with a pack of red eyed wolves
prowling the streets outside
with the remains of children soggy in their mouths.
i hide in excited silence,
staring at the pile of spiders
that writhes in front of me
and I hope not to be found.
I normally hit the return/enter key to start a new line. Maybe you have conficts?
Phil
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Written by Phil (6688 comments posted) 27th May 2007 | Unlikely that you'd have conficts, but you might have conflicts.
Phil |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 27th May 2007 | Or possibly cornflakes.
I'm under the warped floorboards
in the rickety bed and breakfast,
with a pack of red eyed wolves
prowling the streets outside.
The remains of children
soggy in their mouths.
I hide in excited silence,
staring at the pile of spiders
that writhe in front of me.
I hope not to be found.
TAB KEY
RETURN KEY
IT'S ALL SAME
TO ME.
Or even convicts.
| I have MANY conflicts
Written by pualdo (10 comments posted) 27th May 2007 | The tab key? what does that do?
DAMN THESE CORNFLAKES! |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 28th May 2007 | As Phil points out,
hit the return/enter key
to start a new line.
Why I mentioned tab
is beyond me,
perhaps I'd drunk
too much wine?
Wine makes cornflakes
very soggy. |
Written by madeupname (18 comments posted) 28th May 2007 | | I love this life long learning! Poetry, ict and nutrition all in the one sitting!!!! |
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