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By LilGryphMaster
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23 March 2005 |
A very pessimistic poem about a pessimistic person I stole the silver lining from the clouds
I drank the other half of the cup
I cut the power to the bright side Who am I, may you wonder?
Why, I am a pessimist Embrace me,
There is no hope... |
Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 4th October 2005 | | Oh that's kind of scarey. I hope you feel better soon. | Don't usually comment...
Written by idlemusings (80 comments posted) 4th October 2005 | Don't usually comment on poems as I don't think I get them enough to have a valid opinion.
However I enjoyed this one a lot.
Hurray for you!!!! | The Pessimist
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 20th April 2006 | | I liked this poem. I see you wrote this on 4th October. I didn't steal your idea for a poem because I hadn't seen it before, but look at my poem The Optimist and the Pessimist. It took me ages to think of what to write, but I tried to make the last verse a bit saucy - about the hair coming out. Your pessimist would be the one who was complaining about that, but the optimist thanks God that half of his hair is left. He would also say: Embrace me, there is no hope - but I challenge you to do a rhyming line that fits in with the rhythm. I think it would have to be: Embrace me, there's no hope. (three beats). Perhaps: Embrace me, there's no hope - but I shouldn't sit and mope. I wish a few more people would try the rhyming and rhythm. It's a real challenge, but fun and satisfying. Amboline picks up the tiniest thing: Look at my Slow Slow Train to Bridport, and the change I made because he spotted quickly my little problem line. Look at my review underneath. Well done, I liked your poem very much. |
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