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White Noise

By maipenrai

26 July 2005

white noise is a term used to describe a type of psycological interogation

blinding burning my eyes

bright bright lights

burning my eyes

white walls white floor white ceiling

noise noise penetrating

my head my brain

noise noise pressure hose

water cold icy water naked

cold icy water naked

cold noise static noise noise cold static noise

white walls questions questions

questions static static noise

hurting me blinding me

burning cold hurting dying me dying

questions questions questions

pain pain questions

static white noise

questions pain questions

pain questions dying me dying questions

pain

white noise pain

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Written by alandavidpritchard (57 comments posted) 26th July 2005

frenetic, manic and spot on

It's good but...
Written by JJ (14 comments posted) 26th July 2005

I can see where you’re going with this but I think it miss hits rhythmically here and there, because there’s a little too much repetition of the same words. It doesn’t always scan smoothly--try reading it out loud and you might see what I mean. I think with a few of the repetitions taken out you’d have a far tighter and more effective piece. Well done, though, it really is a great idea.

thanks
Written by maipenrai (775 comments posted) 26th July 2005

thank you both very much for your comments
bernie

wow
Written by no1butClo (336 comments posted) 12th July 2006

This indeed remind me strongly and eerily of interrogation. it illustrates what room 101 might be like, and the "static white noise" reminds me of part of The Bell Jar [Sylvia Plath] and her description of electric shock treatmenets.

This rhythm is fantastic adnI think it tends towards being read aloud

great piece with impact and something to think on.

x clo x

ps what sort of interrogation? i must google it...

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