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Poetry
Ripening
By patterjack
11 June 2007
Ripening

The  Bard  said  , and  it's   true ,    that  it's  our   lot
that   first  we  ripe  and  ripe   ,   then  rot  and  rot.
He   had  not    been  the first  ,  and we  can  say  
that   even  before  his  time  it  was  cliche.
But  somehow when  in  his  dramatic   works   we  strike  it                             
in  Lear  ,   and  from  the  Fool  in  As You Like  It
the  cliche disappears  .  In    those   past    times
he  referred   to  well  known issues  ,   wider   ,   deeper
about   the  body  politic  as  mankind's keeper  .

But  modern   interpretations  have narrowed  the  sweep
of  that outreaching  vision  ,  and  we  keep
looking  into  ourselves  in mirrored  reflection
and  substituting now   the  angst  of  introspection .
And that  is  the  kind  of inward  looking    rubbish
that  adolescent  poets  use  to  furbish 
their  plaintive  wails   that  they  cannot  connect
with the  world  around them  that   they  , in  fact ,   reject !
Their  shattered  hearts  bring  confusion to the brain
and  they  swear  they  cannot live  to love   again !
The  lovers then turn  murderous  when  dejected
and in  beginner's prose  the theme  can  be  detected 
though heavily   disguised   and  overlaid  with  gore  ,
but  with  spiritual   disintegration  at  the  core .
Ghouls  and  vampires all  therein  abound
and the  only  sort  of  spirit  to be  found
are  those  of  malevolent   maleficent  kind 
as objective concepts to  which  the  novices bind
each over heated heart   and   vapid   mind  .
And  so  in  self  made  miseries   they  wallow
describing  it  in  terms  too  hard  to swallow.

If  it  stopped  there one  could readily  forgive
for  as  yet  they have not  really  learned  to  live  .
But  the  rot  spreads  outwards ,  like  water  stained  with oil
and  everything  around  begins  to  spoil
so that others  then  decide  that  they  need  harbour
a penchant  for  the  weird  and  the  macabre .

Away  with  truth  then ,  reality's  forgotten
and  over ripeness   leads only to  the  rotten  .

Reviews
Pearls before swine
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (2962 comments posted) 11th June 2007
I did see this in another place but it is blocked to me now. Still no matter here will do. 
I'm not sure what you are doing posting this here for poor ignorant souls like me to comment on. This is the genuine article by someone who knows and understands their art. It flowed beautifully with a gently metre and a clever and subtle rhyme.And more importantly [for me anyway] had something worth saying which could be taken on a parochial level or chunked up to the universal. It had some killer lines in it :- 
"each over heated heart and vapid mind" 
And how many writers fit than brilliantly concise profile?? 
It felt effortless but I'm sure it wasn't and now,apart from showing it to the likes of us, what will you do with it. It deserves a wider audience 
cheers 
Jane 
I'll PM tonight when things are calmer

Written by Phil (5967 comments posted) 11th June 2007
This will sound mighty lazy - but I can't disagree with anything Jane has written. 'Someone who knows and understands his art.' 
 
Killer lines? 
The last two had a little venom! 
 
Something of quality - keep posting. 
 
Phil. 
 
 
Kind of you both
Written by patterjack (913 comments posted) 11th June 2007
This and Caws for Reflection were both very fast efforts , really -- though this one sat around on TextEdit for a while after it had been written . 
 
As I cultivate again the MacNeice conversational style to which I have returned after some time , I am finding writing easier -- both to produce and to throw away , ( as it is often a bit too undisciplined ) -- and it's too easy to fall into flippancy as well . 
 
I may try to get rid of that tendency by writing something like his Bagpipe Music -- a work that with which a stuffy College Principal did his best to entrap me with cries of " Do you call this poetry !!! " 
 
Funny how that refrain comes up so regularly among the ignorant ! 
 
patterjack

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