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The Haunted House
By dante8
11 June 2007
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The Haunted House
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Something I wrote whilst at a loss for anything interesting to write about.


                The house looked injured. It had been one of the unspeaking victims of the Blitz, the war from the air by Hitler’s bombers. It had been a beautiful house-that much was obvious. Huge and sprawling, it dominated the horizon, perched on top of the hill which gave it its name. Tannia Hill. From a long way away, the damage wasn’t obvious. But from close up, it became clear to see where the bombs had fallen. Despite the fact that it was obvious, her father felt it imperative to tell her anyway.
‘Look, you can see it went in there, and then another over there…’
Hannah rolled her eyes. She was seventeen, with long auburn hair. She wore her hair long, and had grown out her fringe, to cover her horrible glasses. Her parents refused, point blank, to buy her contact lenses, despite the fact that they were obviously rich. How else could they afford this enormous dump?
Her father was still talking. He was very excitable; a professor of modern history, he had been elated when this big pile of bricks had come up for sale. They had needed a new house in the area; Hannah’s mother-who, in Hannah’s own opinion, did the real work-had been asked to work here. Normally she would have refused, arguing that uprooting the whole family for the sake of a little money was pointless.
The company she worked for-Allied Legal Agencies-was so tired of hearing this argument that this time they offered a raise equal to a king’s ransom. Her mother hadn’t said exactly how much, but it was quite obviously a lot. Hannah wasn’t bothered about moving; being ginger and the owner of a pair of ‘specs so thick they were practically indestructible (and she had proven this, several times over) didn’t make you the most popular girl in class. Other people worried about leaving their friends behind; Hannah only worried about whether people had noticed if she had left yet. They must do. They must, at least, notice the spare chair.
She thought about her classmates. Each one of them was a clone; Barbie made flesh. Perfect make-up, hair, nails, skin. Hannah knew that they got up before the rest of the world had gone to bed to prepare their faces, and tried to make herself believe that she felt disdain for these self-obsessed girls. In truth, Hannah would quite happily have crawled, snake-like, over burning coals to be like them. Getting up earlier was at the lower end of the scale of things that she was willing to do.
Her mother caught her eye, and smiled. She, too, had auburn hair, but she wore contact lenses. They were tinted; her green eyes obscured by the brown lenses. Hannah wanted ones like that desperately; she had lost count of the times she had begged, pleaded and asked her mother to buy them for her. Her mother had remained adamant: when she was eighteen. Honestly, she was being treated as if she was a child or something.
Hannah threw her mother a look that quite plainly asked, Can we please just go inside? The winter weather was cutting through her thin blouse, and she pulled a jumper out of her rucksack. Her mother nodded to her almost subtly, then said to her still-talking husband, ‘Darling, that’s fascinating! What do you think we’ll find inside?’
‘Only one way to find out!’ said her father, gleefully. ‘We have to take a look!’
Hannah had to hand it to her mother. She could control this man with her eyes shut. And probably regularly did.
Ew. Now there was something that really didn’t bear thinking about.
The darkness was starting to surround them now, and they hurried towards the double doors which led into the house. They were set well back in the wall, and a deep shadow covered them. There was an old-fashioned knocker, shaped like a gargoyle. As they moved towards it, Hannah could have sworn that a gleam shone from its eye, the other having been knocked out or eroded at some time in the past.
The tongue of the gargoyle was out, and its eyebrows raised. A grin stretched from ear to ear, and it seemed to be laughing. Hannah couldn’t work out why, but she felt that it was laughing at her personally.
There was a shiny new lock on the door, which looked totally out of place in the ancient timbers. As her father fumbled for the keys, patting down his pockets and checking his backpack, Hannah stroked the wood. It was cold to the touch, and she guessed that the wood would be more like iron than timber. A combination of heat, cold and time had metamorphosed these wooden doors into a solid barrier.
‘Ah!’
Her father held up the key, squinting in the last rays of the dying sun. The key caught the rays, and shone. It looked tiny in comparison to the huge portal in front of them, and Hannah was struck by the oddness of it. That such a tiny thing could open these doors!


The key slid into the lock. The sun finally slid below the horizon behind them, and a breeze sprung up from nowhere, as if it had been waiting. It whirled around them, playing havoc with their hair. Hannah’s father shielded his face with his arm, and twisted the key in the lock. The door stayed shut. The wind increased, and with it came clouds, springing from nowhere and merging into a huge, dark mass that hung low overhead. Light rain became a stinging onslaught, driven by wind that had changed from mischievous to malevolent.
‘Dad!’ screamed Hannah. Her words were snatched away by the wind, and the rain stung her eyes. ‘Dad, open the door!’
‘I’m trying!’ he bellowed back, struggling against both wind and solid doors. He twisted the key, then suddenly hit it with his shoulder. He wasn’t a small man; her mother joked that if he was only a little slimmer he would be Indiana Jones. But she only said it to Hannah, and when he wasn’t around.
With a sudden slam that seemed to momentarily silence the brewing storm, the door gave. He fell through into pitch blackness. To Hannah, watching from behind him, it seemed that he had vanished. She opened her mouth to scream, and the wind whirled in, forcing its way into her lungs and choking her. It was like drowning.
And then suddenly his face was at the door, beckoning furiously. ‘Get in!’ he shouted, ‘Get in! Quickly!’
Hannah ran to him, the rain now stinging her bare legs. The wind plucked at her skirt, and she tried to tug it down, realising even as she did so that it was futile and ridiculous. Who was going to see her? Her mother and father had seen her naked, for goodness sake. Abandoning her skirt, she fell through the doorway, catching her foot on a crack in the floorboards. She slammed down heavily, putting her arms up too late to protect her from the floorboards. She managed to catch most of the momentum on her knees, but that knowledge was tainted by the insistent stinging that had started in her shins. Her mother followed her quickly, managing to step over whatever had tripped Hannah.
‘Are you alright, hun?’ she asked, looking curiously at her daughter in the gloom.
‘Yeah, fine,’ muttered Hannah, struggling up and brushing her skirt down. ‘Oh-look at this!’
‘What’s that?’
‘Ripped my skirt. Unbelievable!’ She explored the rip with her fingers. ‘There must be some sort of nail down there. Be careful, Dad.’
‘Mmm-hmm,’ replied her father, hardly paying attention. He was going through his rucksack, looking for something. He found it. A beam of white light shot across the hall, and illuminated their new home.
It was clean, that was for sure. Hannah’s mother had insisted on that, and her company had been forced to write out another large cheque; this time for the horde of cleaners who had descended upon the house. It had been worth it, though. Hannah ad seen the house before the cleaners had come. The dust had, in places, been inches thick. Dusting simply revealed another layer of dust.
The kitchen had been home to several families, none of whom got on. For example, a cat and her litter had taken over the pantry, and were keeping down the rats, which had been breeding like-well, like rats.
The counters and sink had been home to an ongoing war between several different species of fungus and hundreds of cockroaches. They were the real reason that the company eventually paid out, after Hannah’s mother offered to send them a box of the things. Each.
‘Have you only got one torch, Dad?’ asked Hannah, nervously. She knew the cleaners had been thorough, but wandering through a house only recently vacated-by both its two-legged and multi-legged inhabitants-made her skin crawl.
‘We should only need one,’ said her father, from the direction of the beam of light. ‘There should be-ah!’
There was a click in the darkness, and Hannah blinked suddenly. Well, they had electricity. That was good, at least.
Hannah looked towards the stairs. They were wide and classical, branching left and right at the top. The banisters, leafed in gold, shone in the light. She had to admit it looked pretty, and there was definitely scope for a party. If anybody would come to a party organised by her, that is.
‘Alright,’ said her father, turning off the torch and becoming business like. ‘Your room is on the right, and ours is on the left. The lorry will be along a bit later, so you can use this time to have a look around.’
‘‘Kay,’ mumbled Hannah, not particularly taken with the idea. She grabbed her rucksack and took the steps two at a time, trying to show willing. The stairs were thickly carpeted, muffling any noise that her feet made. The sheer size of the place seemed to suck away all the noise; she couldn’t have been more than one hundred yards away from her parents, but their voices were faint, barely audible. Hannah shivered; if you screamed in this house, you would be lucky if anyone heard you.
The stairs went up to the second floor then levelled out, doubling back with doors leading off to her left. To her right was the banister rail, gleaming. Looking up, she saw that the rain had increased, the drops seeming almost to throw themselves at the glass roof. Lightning flashed suddenly overhead, and a moment later thunder crashed. The panes of glass seemed to jump in their frames. Hannah tried to control a shiver. Girls of seventeen don’t get spooked by storms. Right. Yeah.
The lights went out.
In the dark and the silence, Hannah opened her mouth to scream. Then she blinked; there was a light in the hallway below. Her father must be down there! She hadn’t heard him, but the carpet would surely have muffled his steps. He must have run very quickly, all the same. Hannah had never seen her father run, but she had never imagined it would be silent. She hadn’t even heard him breathing. She leaned over the banister, and immediately noticed that whilst it was definitely torchlight, the figure holding it certainly wasn’t her father. For a start, it was a woman.
She was pointing the torch out into the night, and Hannah could hear voices out there. They were high-pitched, and sounded scared. The woman was beckoning them in, and Hannah saw a stream of children flood through the doors. They looked soaked through; hair was plastered to pale faces, and several were holding stuffed toys which looked sad and damp. They gathered in the hallway, dripping and whispering nervously. One pointed upwards, and the rest followed his finger. Hannah saw little mouths drop open in little ‘o’s of awe and wonder. Then one of them pointed at her, and she suddenly found herself the centre of attention. One of them shouted, and the lady looked up sharply. Her mouth opened and shut, and then she shouted. Her lips moved, but no sound came out. Someone did, though.
The door opposite Hannah’s room swung open, the light spilling into the hall. A man stepped out, dragging his left leg behind him. He was elegantly dressed, but the beauty of his clothes only emphasised the ugliness of the man himself. He leaned heavily on a cane, and his breathing seemed to be laboured. He saw her, and his face mirrored that of his wife’s, surprise etched into the lines surrounding his small eyes and thick-lipped mouth. Then he began to move along the corridor, heading towards the stairs. The cane made a definite click, click noise on floorboards that had, only seconds ago, been covered with thick carpet. His leg dragged behind him, and his breath rasped in his throat. Hannah watched as he reached the top of the stairs, curiously removed from the fear which should have been choking her.
There was another flash, and Hannah shut her eyes instinctively. When she re-opened them, she saw her father coming out of the same door that the other man had emerged from.
‘What happened?’ called her father. His voice was muffled once again by the carpet that had appeared out of nowhere, as quickly as it had vanished.
‘Lights fused, I think,’ said Hannah.
‘Well, they seem to be working now. I’ll ring an electrician tomorrow; don’t want to get anyone out in this weather if they don’t have to be.’ He vanished back into his room.
Hannah knew that this was just her father being kind-hearted, but all the same, she still wanted the lights fixed. There was a chandelier a couple of meters above her, the candles replaced by bulbs at some point. Hannah thought they looked awful, but was grateful that she could see. She looked down into the hallway; and as she had suspected, there was nothing there. What had she expected?
She turned and walked into her room. The door opened soundlessly, and closed with a click.
Had she actually gone down to the hall and looked carefully at the floor, she would have been slightly more reluctant to wait until the next day for the electrician. The dark carpet disguised it well, but dotted here and there were darker patches. As though a group of people had stood there for a little while, so soaked that they had dripped.
 The next day dawned bright and fresh, all signs of the storm gone. Looking out of her windows and seeing the blue skies which stretched as far as she could see, the darkness and ghosts of the previous night seemed ridiculous. She was tired and spooked by the storm, and had seen things. That was the obvious-and only-explanation.
The removals people had called yesterday evening, to say that there was no chance of them being able to get to the house before Friday. Today was Wednesday. Her mother had questioned this furiously, but had been forced to admit defeat when the driver had coolly suggested that she could drive the eighteen-ton, high-sided lorry up the steep hill in the pouring rain and driving wind. In the dark. Hannah hadn’t heard a word of this conversation; shattered from the stress and long drive, she had been asleep the moment she fell into her impressive four-poster. She turned now and examined it, admiring it from several angles. Red mahogany wood made up the posts, and the mattress was impressively deep.

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