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By maipenrai
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12 June 2007 |
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the soldiers found her,
undressed her,
raped her,
killed her,
just another day in
Kivu,
end of story. |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 12th June 2007 | Just another day in africa, end of story.
Rai, are you Sri Lankan? It's nice to know who you're talking to.
Best wishes
Steve. |
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 12th June 2007 | Thanks Steve, no mate, born and bred Manc,
maipenrai or mai pen rai is Thai for=no problem
cheers mate
bernie |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 12th June 2007 | No problem.
Cheers.
Steve.
PS. Thanks for educating me in Thai. |
Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 12th June 2007 | This has impact in its direct and casual telling.
Personally, I'd have put a full stop following 'killed her' and 'Kivu' and capitalised the first 'the' 'just' and 'end.' Only a personal preference. I've not got my head round poetic license with punctuation!
Again. This has impact.
Phil. |
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 12th June 2007 | | thanks Phil |
Written by Seagull (174 comments posted) 25th July 2007 | You could write what I know about poetry on the head of a pin...but for me the impact would be greater without the last line.
That said, this is powerful in its directness.
Chris |
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