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Plastic Sheeting and Jerrycans. |
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By maipenrai
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14 June 2007 |
importent things are plastic sheeting and jerrycans? Blue plastic sheeting you see it everywhere at the rubbish tip discarded with all the other garbage, and do you ever use them jerrycans the last time? they fight for them you know they are importent, plastic sheeting and jerrycans. the women scream and scratch the men vicious in their need for the biggest, the best of the plastic sheeting. they are importent for survival you see, the sheeting to protect from the wind, sand and rain the jerrycans to hold the families precious water. simple things importent things in the camps. |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 14th June 2007 | | Sp: important | Bugger, didn't mean to post yet.
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 14th June 2007 | Line 5: them/those?
Much to edit in this. This one is more suited to prose I think. Can't see this (in its present form) accompanying a photograph.
Still have issues with capitalisation and punc!
Phil |
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 14th June 2007 | Thanks Phil, on looking at this again there does appear quite a bit that can be removed, could you do me a favour re the capitalisation and punc and explain where i am going wrong, my grammer is the pits mate.
Bernie |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 14th June 2007 | | PMed. |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 14th June 2007 | Regardless of gramma, you paint such incredible pictures with your words.
Several years ago I flew out to Goa and on the way we were given headphones in plastic pouches, which I kept. At the end of the holiday I went down to the beach to give certain items, which we were not taking home, to the gypsy children who sold clothes on the beach.
There were T-shirts, shoes, towels, etc, but they all went absolutely made for the plastic pouches (or ‘pockets’ as they called them).
They had no purses and kept all of their takings wrapped up in pieces of cloth, so a plastic pouch with a cord to that you could hang around your neck was the prize possession.
Things that we take for granted can be so valuable to people who have nothing!
When I go back to Goa, I will be visiting my local £1 shop to buy up every purse they have.
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Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 15th June 2007 | Thanks Steve, yes it is amazing what we consider to be worth nothing can be of value to others.
in many places i have been the value of such simple things as pens, pencils, note books etc are of such high value to the school kids you would be amazed.
thanks mate
Bernie |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 15th June 2007 | I don’t know if Phil PM’ed you a Spagless version, but if not, here is my attempt.
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Blue plastic sheeting,
you see it everywhere
at the rubbish tip
discarded with all the other garbage.
Do you ever use them,
jerry cans?
The last time?
They fight for them you know!
They are important,
plastic sheeting and jerry cans.
The women scream and scratch,
the men vicious in their need
for the biggest, the best
of the plastic sheeting.
They are important
for survival you see,
the sheeting to protect from the
wind, sand and rain,
the jerry cans to hold the
families precious water.
Simple things
are important things
in the camps.
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Grammar and punctuation are such fickle things depending on ones intention. If you meant that the women scratch the men, then perhaps this is the correct punctuation
The women scream and scratch
the men, vicious in their need
for the biggest, the best
of the plastic sheeting.
Best wishes, and keep posting the images.
Steve.
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Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 16th June 2007 | Thanks Steve.
Bernie |
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