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By JakeWilding
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17 June 2007 |
This poem is really all the questions that eat away at the back of my mind and have yet to find an answer to...therefore i ask you to ask yourselves What is the meaning of life?
Is it to live recklessly and wildly?
Or to live relaxingly and mildly?
Would you rather live fast and die young?
Or grow old achieving much to nothing?
Is it better to be remembered by hatred?
Or be forgotten forever?
Is it not best to be a somebody rather than a nobody?
Who would want to be just another face in the crowd?
What would you have to do to stand out and be noticed?
Was religion created to give hope to the lonely person in despair?
What is there to fear when eternal peace is waiting?
How much i would love to believe in such things? Would i then not fear death?
But when my time comes, spending eternity in darkness will be my eternal peace
This is why life should be lived to the full. My biggest fear is not death....but not having lived. |
The Eternal Question
Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 17th June 2007 | | I think that as a poem you have little form here. As with the poem above yours, I have said that for me, the irregularity of the lines, winding upwards until the longest line of all at the end, doesn't render it as a poem to me. I guess I like things tidy. I think there is too much put in the poetry section that would be better written for other areas of this website, and you could write a wonderful piece of prose asking all these questions, and backing up what you have to say. As for the answer this is what I think, but I don't expect many agree with me: If you have God in your heart, and ask Him to show yhou the way in life, keeping your heart open, you can see doors open that lead you into areas which you may never have thought of yourself. I could give you hundreds of examples. Follow the open door, is my philosophy - as long as that door leads to goodness in life that is. The door is likely to open at any time, and doesn't take age into consideration one little bit. |
Written by Phil (6688 comments posted) 17th June 2007 | Okay, not a new subject - and I don't think you covered any new ground. In fact some of your ideas were well worn platitudes.
I agree with Josie about the form - in thatit lends nothing to poem's meaning or impact. I don't agree with Josie about this making a wonderful prose piece. The subject is fine, but you need a fresher yake/angle.
It needs a good edit.
As for god - each to their own. Bit preachy there I thought, Josie.
Sorry I couldn't be more positive.
Phil | Believe in yourself Jake!
Written by JohnnyD (89 comments posted) 20th June 2007 | | I liked the way you have put up things in this piece. Who decides what is a poem & what is not? Believe in yourself and write what comes out from your heart Jake! Keep up the good work and don't (& NEVER) allow others to dictate your style of writing. You are unique in your own way as others are. So tread the path of GREATWRITING fearlessly! Create your style of writing so that people will follow you one day! Cheers! |
Written by Richie (15 comments posted) 20th June 2007 | i like this one Jake. Do you know that the Romanies have exactly the same belief? i.e. Live life to the full with not a care in the world. There is an excellent book i read and which is still in my library and it's by a Romany who's name escapes me right now but if you are interested then message me for his name in a few weeks. By then i should have his name. i'm not at home right now. The book is called Bury me standing
Cheers
Richie |
Written by Richie (15 comments posted) 20th June 2007 | i've just realised (coz i'm new to the internet) i could search it on Google. i have and it's by Isabel Fonseca.
i'm sure tis book goes into this subject but if not check out George borrow's Lavengro and his conversation with Jasper about the wind on the heath. Superb reference in a nutshell.
However, personally, i do believe in an after-life.
i may post a poem about my thoughts on the game of pool which is quite strong on the subject of judgement here on earth: but i've promised my reviewers here a happier one next time! |
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