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Poetry
Lost
By JakeWilding
17 June 2007
I always seem to ask a lot of questions, i suppose it's because i never seem to be able to find the answer


I am the man of big decisions!
Have I made enough provisions?
Is it what I see on the televisions?
That makes me do all these wild missions.
 

Lie Lie Lie!
Kill Kill Kill!
Terrorize Terrorize Terrorize!
Memorize Memorize Memorize!
 

Is it the computer game?
To give yourself a name.
What is the real aim?
Who is really to blame?
 

Is it all the music?
Which makes them abusive.
Or is it the ones who use it?
Who keep themselves elusive.
 

Or should it be the parents?
Who are constantly standing by us,
Who are to blame
For giving us a name.
 

Is it the teachers?
Who are paid to teach us,
Who are to blame
For making us understand our name.
 

Is it our peers?
Who reduce us to tears.
Is it them to blame?
For sharing our name.
 

Who does that leave,
For us to believe?
Is it them who lead us
Who try and miss lead us?
 

 

We are forced to elect.
Them who protect
The ones who we care for most.
But now all we are is lost.

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Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 18th June 2007
Not for me, sorry. 
 
You need to go through this very carefully and look at punctuation and grammar issues. Even with that solved, I think you'd only be scratching the surface. 
 
Phil

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