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The Wicked Wizard and the Elves
By Josie
18 June 2007
A children's story poem, but this one, unfortunately, has a sad ending, so you'll need your hankies ready.  This is a narrative poem, which I think would be really good acted out by children in a class.  I think that it is nice to bring drama into poetry in this way, and this is one of the things that our new children's laureate wants to see in classrooms - poetry brought alive.



The Elves said:

“Wizard, great wizard, what must we do
To become famous and rich, exactly like you?”
    The wizard replied:  “You have all that you need –
    Just work hard for me now!  Enough of your greed!”

The elves thought:  

'But look how he lives.  He seems to do well.
Now surely he'll help us with just one little spell.'
   "A life without money makes us feel so depressed.
    Oh please, Mr Wizard, just grant this request."

The wizard thought:

“I don’t want these elves to be richer than I, -
  To be strutting around with their heads in the sky.
      I’ll tell them a lie, put an idea in their heads”
      And with a smirk on his face, here’s what he said:

“When you see a full moon sitting high in the sky –
 Here’s a little known trick that I think you could try.
     Catch in your bucket the moon's silver reflection –
     You’ll see where she shines - row in that direction.”

And he pointed his finger towards the river

Each evening they waited, and looked at the sky –
One night the full moon shone down from on high.
    The elves took their boats and went to the river –
    A cold wind was blowing, but they’d no time to shiver.

Far out into the river went three little boats –
And sitting inside were the elves in green coats.
     Far out on the river, the moon’s beams shone bright.
     “All that valuable silver” they thought in delight.

But rivers can be treacherous, as people know well –
And the little boats soon bounced along on the swell –
   They crashed on the rocks and the little elves drowned –
    And I’m afraid that a sad end was all that they found.


Copyright 2007
     

Reviews

Written by Phil (6388 comments posted) 19th June 2007
You do a pretty good parrable for Marx here. The rich only get rich due to the efforts of others - and - the others always suffer at the hands of the rich. I'm sure he put it a little more succinctly than that. 
 
Liked this a lot Josie. Story flowed along well,and if it was used in a classroom, there's plenty of points for discussion. 
 
Verse two didn't quite scan for me. Possibly could read: 
and dogs in his yard 
 
Don't know if this gives the same menace though. 
 
Nice one Josie. 
 
Phil.
Phil
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 19th June 2007
I hope that people understood that it was liquid silver from the moon's reflection that the elves thought would be valuable. There is the warning in the Bible about not coveting what your neighbour has, but I don't think the elves wanted what he had exactly. They just wanted a little money for themselves, and even said that they didn't want to get it by magic or stealth. I think they really thought that the moon's reflection was liquid silver, for the taking - rather like we take and eat an apple from a tree. There again, children should realize that riches should be worked for. Poor little things. What a sad end. Children will realize that not all stories have happy endings, and I hope that this story will lead them to think about stories which don't have happy endings. It is very difficult to write what could be a long story into a few verses, but I wanted this done like this as I feel it could be a short drama in a class.
Phil
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 19th June 2007
Returning to your comment. I agree about the dogs in the yard. I have changed this verse around and I hope this reads better. You were absolutely right.

Written by Phil (6388 comments posted) 19th June 2007
This reads much better now you've changed it Josie. 
 
Phil.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 30th June 2007
I liked this, and in particular the lines in boldface between the verses. And I don't think there's anything wrong in children hearing a sad story once in a while. It is good preparation for life! 
 
Am I wrong in thinking that there is a fairy tale about trying to catch moonbeams by holding buckets out to trap the moon's reflection? Or maybe my old mind is playing tricks on me...?

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 25th July 2007
Good poem. Not sure if it belongs in this section of the site, yet on the other hand, it is a bit of a fairy tale, eventhough a tragic one (but so is the little mermaid, and at least this one has a message). 
A bit of a Tolkienish atmosphere to this... Elves, moonlight, wizards, and over all... greed.

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