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She collects knives, you know
By smidge
18 June 2007
She kept knives in the attic you know,
Her husband always tried to get up there to
"Clear out that hellhole".
He thought the most dangerous things above his head were
Various creepy crawlies.
But he didn't know.

When he went to his poker nights
She climbed the foldaway stairs
Laid each knife on her lap
(Although some could be counted as swords)
And stroked it like a kittne,
But it didn't purr.
And she'd smile, because they did have a kitten
Once.

He found it drowned in the river by their house
And he didn't know
It'd actually died in his bathtub
The same one he'd washed the
"Dead cat smell"
Off his skin after he'd buried it.
And she'd looked upset,
Shed a tear; two at most
Pretending to be strong.
Well,
She was stronger than that cat.

And a year later,
He went fishing in that same river
He went fishing a lot, recently
Too much, she thought.
He'd been out four times this week
And it's only Tuesday
She never checked on him though
"A good wife does not spy"
Her husband's life was his own.

"Pity it's going to end when he comes in for supper"
She thought
Knife in hand
      (Although this was one of those that could be counted as a sword)
It was going to be a good supper too.
Roast chicken.
For one.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6675 comments posted) 18th June 2007
I quite like this. Reminds me a little of Michael Rosen of Roger McGough. I get the two mixed up. I couldn't quite put my finger on the piece's tone. Funny or dark. It's possibly supposed to be darkly funny - but doesn't come across like that. 
 
Really liked the title. 
 
There are some here who may say this isn't poetry - and they may very well be right - but this has a certain something. 
 
Phil.

Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 18th June 2007
Yes, I enjoyed this too, but can't understand why it isn't just posted as short prose?

Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 19th June 2007
Good one this, enjoyed it a lot. 
Bernie

Written by wltshr (300 comments posted) 21st June 2007
Very dark and enjoyable.  
 
Regards 
 
Wltshr

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