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| A fling / a fall | |
| By ceramix | ||||||||
| 20 June 2007 | ||||||||
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This seemed like a good idea but now I'm not so sure. I love poetry but lack the 'ear' for it, so advice on rhythm and structure would be much appreciated. Doggerel, or doggerel with potential? Please comment. The title is not a choice, by the way, but both things. You said I might've followed you You said I might have followed you Eyes downcast, chin thrust forward like a regretful provocation You are beyond belief The tea things on the table Watch and wait While I twirl a spoon and "Huh!" with stunned spite. Funny, this is your pride and my fall. I, follow you? A playlet of unrequited love (you'd like to think) You are both a seasoned performer and spellbound viewer In either role you excel, in a hammy kind of way. A chancer, a fan of the high jump and swift fall - Really, fearful that I would follow you? That I, a fool for you, would not understand goodbye? We avoid each other's eyes and pay the bill. A fool, and worst of all A romantic, that's you.
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