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Poetry
Unfair
By Talisker
21 June 2007

Mum tells me the best of life is free,

so why does sulky Sue charge 50p?

To feel her brush her lips against my cheek,

costs all my pocket money for a week!

I had to sell my book of football stickers,

for just a peek at Chloe’s frilly knickers!

And I let Elli see me do a pee,

for nothing! Not a penny! Free!

 

Oli 21/06/07

Reviews

Written by Phil (6635 comments posted) 21st June 2007
I always went for a fair exchange: you show me yours, and I'll show you mine. Like you, I never made a profit from urinating though. Enjoyed this Oli. 
 
Phil

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st June 2007
There's a reason (most) people don't make a profit from urinating... :grin  
 
At least I apparently didn't charge you for the company, Oli. Very remiss of me actually. lololol. Think I got a bit of a bum deal in this one! 
 
You're a daft bugger. 
 
Elli :grin
at least
Written by fellpony (1575 comments posted) 21st June 2007
All Oli's fantasies came and joined GW  
:grin  
Sue (not the 50p one though)

Written by Phil (6635 comments posted) 21st June 2007
Elli, do tell. How do a small few make a living urinating?

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st June 2007
That's not for me to say... Google might be able to help you out but best not to do that at work.  
 
Elli 
 
ps. I did hear on the radio that there are a fair number of people in the States who use their urine to water their vegetables. So I guess there's one way though you'd need to drink a hell of a lot to make any money out of that lol. 
 

Written by coosh (844 comments posted) 21st June 2007
Predator urine is very good for deterring moles. There must be a Golden Shower Club listed in the Bolton Yellow Pages.

Written by madeupname (18 comments posted) 22nd June 2007
This is really funny. Thanks I needed that but hoping paying for those things stays innocent!!! :grin
Unfair
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 24th June 2007
Nice one Oli, If I organise a small party next week could you come along? bring Sue, Chloe and Elli and a pocketful of loose change! 
Cliff 

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