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JUST ONE SMILE

Just one smile, if I could leave behind

How wonderful it would be!

Neither would I lose anything

Nor would I gain anything

Simply a smile

Knowing I had left behind

A smile, remembered forever

For making someone real happy!

Just one smile, if I could leave behind

In the everyday struggle of my life

If millions could learn

Just watching the smile

If millions could get enlightenment

Understanding the smile

All the chaos in life

Does it really fetch anything at all?

That is why my friends

Let us leave behind just one smile

In our everyday struggle of life

Just one!

- Johnny D

22^nd June 2007

Reviews

Written by Phil (6688 comments posted) 23rd June 2007

Nice sentiments Johnny, but as a piece of poetry, it does nothing for me.

Phil.

Bring me sunshine..
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 23rd June 2007

Bring me sunshine in your smile bring me laughter all the while
In this world where we live there should be more happiness
So much joy you can give to each brand new bright tomorrow
Make me happy through the years never bring me any tears
Let your arms be as warm as the sun from up above
Bring me fun bring me sunshine and bring me love

This was (I believe) penned by country and western singer Jack Greene, then made famous (in UK anyway) by genius comics Morcambe & Wise. You know what Johnny? Sorry! But this says what you are trying to say, only a million times better!

Just go for it Johnny
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 24th June 2007

People should never be discouraged from trying to express themselves, because if everybody were to accept the fact that it has all already been done before, then we lose all creativity.

Not everyone can be up to GW ‘elitist’ standards, and what would happen if they were?

Rather than copying out an old song to prove a point, try helping the person to improve their poem if you feel that their work is not up to ‘GW’ standard.

JUST ONE SMILE
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 24th June 2007

I feel that you have expressed the sentiments behind this poem admirably. Although I am not too enamoured by the two line make up of the two stanzas. I think you have done a better job of it than the lyricist quoted by Steve.
Cliff

Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 24th June 2007

I think you have done a better job of it than the lyricist quoted by Steve.

Cliff, wasn't aware that I had quoted a lyricist!!

Jut OneSmile
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 26th June 2007

Sorry Steve, I meant to say Oli. I agree wholeheartedly with your comments.
Cliff

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