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There Was Oil In Your Name
By uche
25 June 2007
Oloibiri was the first community Shell discovered crude oil on.

Oloibiri
there was oil in your name
release of sweet-smelling fragrance
cleared an ingress to your heart
you never read Rubadiri’s Mutesa
so when the Corporation came
exploration tools in hand
womb-scraping machinery primed
briefcases sagging with gilded promises
you threw wide open your arms
virginal yet flirtatious
so deep into your earth
they scoured and dug
left you parched
shell-shocked…

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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 25th June 2007
Political pieces often don't work well for me. This was nearly there though. I liked the body metaphor - ingress to heart, womb scraping, open arms, virginal etc. However, the final metaphor - shell shocked - doesn't quite fit for me. 
 
Lots to like. 
 
Phil.
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Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 25th June 2007
on this one, though I didn't mind the political message too much myself. 

Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 26th June 2007
You make a good point with this well written poem and  
Shell and other Oil companys certainly have a big case to answer re exploitation but why have you not mentioned the the never ending line of totally corrupt goverments, who for the sake of lining their own bank accounts with millions at the expense of the people allow this exploitation to happen?

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