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Curse of the Gargoyles
By TurboWolffe
26 June 2007
Gargoyles have ariesen from their dark, lifeless sleep atop their crumbling stone pillars.  Beware the curse of the gargoyle.

Stone figures, bathed in moonlight
Guarding the ancient night
Atop the stone pillars and rafters
And when the chord strikes
They rise from the night
To soar to amazing heights
They flutter from place to place
Showing their terrifying face
Lips curled over their jaws
Stone hands with iron claws
Wings that spread across the sky
Ready to swoop and make you die
Gargoyles arisen from stone
A curse to all who pass by
But when the horizon spreads pink
They flutter home and are soon gone
And short-lived is the Curse
Of the gargoyles

When again do they strike
Flying from stone, into the night
Lifeless, bereft, and possesed
Clutched by a demonic plight
And roaming everywhere like a pest
Taking what they want, and don't really need
The chord shall strike, though, oncemore
And they will swoop down in scores

Reviews

Written by stevetroster (1588 comments posted) 26th June 2007
Beware, the Curse of the Gargoyles may get you!!! 
Stick to short stories, where you are safe. 
 
Your poem delivers its message very clearly, however I believe that you are better at prose. 
 
Best wishes 
Monster. 
 
:eek

Written by Phil (6828 comments posted) 26th June 2007
There are parts of this that work really well - that create an atmosphere. 
eg/ First three lines. 
 
Other parts don't work so well and sound more like narrative than poetry.  
 
A good attempt at gothic. Worth some work? 
 
Phil.

Written by no1butClo (338 comments posted) 27th June 2007
Lose the rhyme - it doesn't seem to flow in what I've read - and the 'curse' [a little dramatic] and you've got some great imagery, currently fighting to get out, that will really do you proud. 
 
Definitely worth some work :grin  
 
clo

Written by no1butClo (338 comments posted) 27th June 2007
Lose the rhyme - it doesn't seem to flow in what I've read - and the 'curse' [a little dramatic] and you've got some great imagery, currently fighting to get out, that will really do you proud. 
 
Definitely worth some work :grin  
 
clo

Written by no1butClo (338 comments posted) 27th June 2007
Lose the rhyme - it doesn't seem to flow in what I've read - and the 'curse' [a little dramatic] and you've got some great imagery, currently fighting to get out, that will really do you proud. 
 
Definitely worth some work :grin  
 
clo

Written by no1butClo (338 comments posted) 27th June 2007
Lose the rhyme - it doesn't seem to flow in what I've read - and the 'curse' [a little dramatic] and you've got some great imagery, currently fighting to get out, that will really do you proud. 
 
Definitely worth some work :grin  
 
clo

Written by no1butClo (338 comments posted) 27th June 2007
Lose the rhyme - it doesn't seem to flow in what I've read - and the 'curse' [a little dramatic] and you've got some great imagery, currently fighting to get out, that will really do you proud. 
 
Definitely worth some work :grin  
 
clo
crap...
Written by no1butClo (338 comments posted) 27th June 2007
Sorry! Damn this establishment and their stupid slow machines...

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