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ANT JACK COMES TO THE WORLD OF GIANTS!
By prodigy
29 June 2007

 HI!
 THIS IS A NOVEL I GOT INSPIRED TO WRITE BY AN ANT!

 CHECK IT OUT!


 The little ant Jack crawled out of the anthill , yawning.

 "Good morning!" ,his mother Jill greeted.

 Jack ran as fast as he could.

 Today , Uncle Jake was going to tell Jack about the
 world of giants , or as Jake called them , 'humans'.
 Jack found his uncle waiting near the big tree.
 "Good morning Jack!"
 "Good morning , uncle!"

 Uncle Jake told Jack the story of the human world , where uncle Jake had lived few years back , until he got
 on something called a 'ship' and was washed to this island which had only ants and few other species of insects. Uncle Jake always refused to tell Jack how he understood 'human' language.
After the story, Jack rushed to his anthill to tell his dad about the humans.
His mother replied , "I really don't know where he is."

Jack ran out of the anthill and searched and searched and searched for his dad.
Jack reached the far end of the beach , where his mother
never let him go.

He saw his dad unconscious on a leaf floating in the water!

Suddenly , a wave washed Jack on the leaf!
Jack fainted.


He woke up on the beach.
It was dirtier than ever!
Large chunks of unknown waste.
This was not the beach he knew.
When he saw the giant creature approaching,
he took a wild guess.
It was a human!!! 

Reviews

Written by prodigy (23 comments posted) 30th June 2007
 
Please rate this chapter ,guys. 
 
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Written by Gill21 (594 comments posted) 17th July 2007
A good idea but needs to be stretched out, or cut down to a poem. As it is i don't think it really works but there is certainly potential. I like the idea of an inquisitive child ant, there's plenty of room for adventure and mischief! The bit about his Dad dying was a bit sad, and do you think an ant would faint? You are trying to make humans mysterious, so perhaps ensure you don't personify the ants too much. :)

Written by Gill21 (594 comments posted) 17th July 2007
I have just read Dark World and the others have given you good advice, i just wanted to say that from this i would never have guessed english wasn't your first language! You've got some great ideas and it's great you've the confidence to post. Keep working on your stories and we'll keep reading!

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