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Poetry
Cubicle
By ChairmanMeow
29 June 2007
Yes it's fairly adolescent, but so am I.


I want to be
alone.
Let me be, let me die,
let me have a moment
to myself.

There's love just not
the love i thought it was.
Is that it?
Stop me please
if i'm wrong.

Let me breathe, allow
the hate to grow
and then subside.
Just give me a chance
to heal.

Let me lie here fetal
and futile.
I'm not your friend, I
never was, I love you
I don't like you.

Let me forget, let it be
forgotten, it's not easy
to forget what you have.
Stop pretending
that I'm fine.

Give me the grace
so that I may carry on.
You've let me go
now please release me.
Let me ascend.

Let me be misery itself,
solitude and worthless,
endo-loathing and exo-loathing.
Let me die
so that I may live again.

Reviews

Written by Talisker (1336 comments posted) 29th June 2007
I kind of like the "endo-loathing and exo-loathing" inwards and outwards thing. 
 
You are right of course, this is teenage angst put into words. We never lose it entirely though, but it doesn't make for "pleasant" reading. 
 
Oli

Written by Phil (6997 comments posted) 29th June 2007
We never completely lose it, no. But as Oli says, doesn't always make easy reading. I too liked the endo/exo thing. Could have copied the above review really! 
 
Welcome to GW. 
 
Phil

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 30th June 2007
Sorry but to me this is a mix of the nonsensical and the clichéd. I think you need to focus your emotions a bit more into what you are writing (I hope that makes sense) rather than just writing down what you feel. Poetry requires some discipline and control, which of course isn't easy to learn but I think is worth learning in the end.

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