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By uche
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02 July 2007 |
outcome of a state of emergency in a village
Vultures circle overhead
Eager to prick the bloated bellies
Soldiers prowl back and forth
Eager to snuff another protester’s life
Armoured tanks rumble like elephants
Eager to crush both grass and crops
The little boy wears a face like mask
Eager to snatch the forgotten rifle.
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Could you tell us more
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 2nd July 2007 | | What was the state of emergency and where? |
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 3rd July 2007 | POWERFUL Uche.
Bernie | thanks
Written by uche (44 comments posted) 3rd July 2007 | Bernie
thanks for the loaded compliments
did i mention that your poems: Support Your Government Forces and Kivu: inspired this poem & Village Story? thanks again
Josie, the state of emergency is manifest in most african states i.e Darfur, Niger Delta, Somalia, etc. the spectre africa is sadly becoming. i fear. |
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 3rd July 2007 | Hi Uche, believe me my friend my comments were a complement on the poem and for the fact that you are bringing to the attention of a audence that may not know what life is like for thousands upon thousands of people.
I am glad that Support your goverment forces and kivu were of use to you.
Take Care Mate.
Bernie |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 3rd July 2007 | Powerful ideas, but the words don't have the high impact of your previous piece. (For me anyway)
I think (and I could be completely wrong) it's because you move from one point to the next too quickly.
Don't get me wrong, well worth the read, just as poetry, not as hard hitting as your last.
Phil. | O, Phil
Written by uche (44 comments posted) 3rd July 2007 | thanks for the sincere compliments
but you nearly broke my heart, o Phil |
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