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Written by fellpony
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02 July 2007 |
This is a sequence of words that pops into my head sometimes when I'm coming over the hill homeward - especially apt in the last few days when we've had a lot of storm showers followed by bright sunshine.
Counted the syllables and oh dear, here we have yet another haiku. I'll be doing 'em in me sleep before long.
from hailstone-white hills
winter slants away westward
trailing sun-warmed skirts
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I'll try once more
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 2nd July 2007 | | to give you a review. I see you didn't get my last one. I said: I liked your poem. It was simply put and beautifully descriptive. I liked some of your simple but beautiful phrases, eg: training sun-warmed skirts etc. Quite lovely. (Oh where has summer gone? - "hailstone-white hills" and this is mid summer!) | I told you so
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 2nd July 2007 | Haikus can be addictive . I went cold turkey and broke the habit but still get the cravings now and then.
I have joined Haikus Anonymous.
patterjack | thanks
Written by fellpony (1749 comments posted) 2nd July 2007 | Josie, Brian.
Back to H.A., Brian, you're still doing it:
"I went cold turkey
and broke the habit but still
get cravings now [and] again "
(well, almost) | Oh bugger !
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 2nd July 2007 | It was unintentional -- and I am warned .
Apprehensive as well , now !
patterjack |
Written by Phil (6997 comments posted) 3rd July 2007 | Lovely - the layers of description work well.
Phil. | Lovely...
Written by Talisker (1336 comments posted) 3rd July 2007 | Barely took a puff,
the drug never got to my blood..so be it...
Oli  | weird
Written by fellpony (1749 comments posted) 4th July 2007 | how the shortest poems can cause so many reactions. Oli:
stub out the fag end
bin the dead whisky bottle
give up the haiku |
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