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Heavenly Snapshot - scene 7 and END
By jean.day
04 July 2007

March 25, 2007


Scene:


Stage is an office set with a table which houses a computer and printer and a chair. The ghosts are circled around the computer, obviously very confused by what it is, and even what is going on.


Extra cast for this scene.


Jean, Middle aged woman, with glasses, wearing jeans and sweatshirt. She is seated at the computer, checking her email.


Philip, temporarily bald, her husband, wearing checked short sleeved shirt and trousers.


Elizabeth: Well we knew we were owed another visit but this is really a surprise. What is that strange box which seems to have words on it, I wonder.


Sarah: These people must be relatives of some sort, or we wouldn’t be here, but she certainly doesn’t look like one of us.


Jean types away, and suddenly she shouts:


Jean: Philip, come here. You’ll never guess what.


Mary: Listen to that accent. She’s an American. I knew she wasn’t one of us.


Philip: (coming into the room and looking at the screen with her) No, tell me.


Jean: I’ve just had this email and it’s from somebody from Hawaii. This guy, he’s called Jeff, says that he’s related to you. He read my book, Day after Day, on the Openwriting site, and he found out that the relatives of yours that I mentioned in that, are exactly the same names as he has been researching for his family.


Philip: I don’t believe it. He probably is just making it up. What exactly does he say?


Jean: Here, I’ll read it to you.


"I descended from Sarah Burgess and James Robinson's son Michael. Michael's seventh child Herbert. My great-grandfather, immigrated with his family first to Canada, then the U.S. around 1900. (Although his eldest son remained in Canada.) They settled in Zion, Illinois. His third child, Percy, was my Grandfather. My mother, Marjorie Robinson was born in Zion, Illinois, but ran away at age 16, to Chicago. My mother married my father (her second husband) when she was 32. They met in Chicago. My father was in the US Navy, so they lived in many places, mostly West Coast, although my sister was born on Kwajalein Atoll, in the middle of the Pacific Ocean, post WWII USA occupation, and my twin brother and I were born in San Diego, where they finally settled after my father retired from the Navy. I ended up in Hawaii, through a forced job transfer, against my wish at the time, but that was almost 20 years ago. So in a very brief way, this is how I am related and how I ended up in Hawaii."


Philip: All very interesting, but he could have gleaned those details off your story on the internet.


Jean: No he couldn’t. I’m sure I never mentioned the names of Sarah and James’ family in that book.


Jane: Well, how about that. Your relatives, Sarah, all seem to be Americans now.


Jean: Anyway, he goes on.


"My mother passed away when I was 11. I had only heard a few stories about her family, and had only met briefly my grandfather and the aunts and uncles. I remember being told that we descended from royalty, that the family in England was at one time very wealthy, but that Herbert (my great-grandfather) had been disowned by the family. My mother even gave me a "family heirloom," inherited through a favorite aunt, a gold brooch in a velvet lined leather case, that I was told was passed down from the royal line. At 11, I hid it away with the other mementos of my mother, and fortunately still have it today.

"Due to the early loss of my mother, I was always curious about who my mother was. This of course included her genealogy. In my 20's, I attempted to gain more information, but my only sources, my living aunts and uncles, did not respond to my letters of request for information about the Robinsons. I could not understand why their responses were only cordial, "nice to hear from you", "hope you are doing well," but no answers to my direct questions about who we were. In time I got on with my life and career, but now having recently retired, I have more time on my hands and have decided to begin my search again.

"In the age of the Internet, ancestry research has become a lot easier. The access to records made it possible for me to trace my Robinson lineage back to James and Sarah Robinson, but it stopped there. I was able to locate their dates of death, burial sites (Egham, Sussex) and James' Will. In my course of research, I did discover some interesting facts, like Michael Robinson having spent his last 16 years in an asylum, but I was frustrated at not being able to search further. I was also trying to find the royal link.


"James and Sarah Robinson, resided and died (1830's) in Egham, and were buried in the Parish churchyard. James' Will did mention a son-in-law, James King, and the Latter Day Saints web site had an unverified mention that Michael's mother was Sarah Burgess, but I could not document that. I also was able to obtain a Monumental Inscription for Sarah, relict of the late James Robinson, that had been recorded and archived years ago in the Surrey Family History Society's archive, but gave no further clues to Sarah.

"I had an opportunity to go to Europe this month and I decided to go visit the graves of James and Sarah while I was in London. Last Thursday, I took the train to Egham, to visit the Parish church. I had contacted the church ahead of my visit and they welcomed me. Inside the church I was delighted to see a memorial plaque to James and Sarah, and a daughter who was also buried there."


Sarah: Oh I can’t believe this. This is so exciting. It must be Priscilla’s grave he found. And to think that there is a memorial plaque to us in the church. But we were rather important people, you know.


Elizabeth: Well, I expect we all had plaques at our churches too. But hush, let’s listen to the rest of this.


"I was told that they must have been important members of the Parish and were most likely buried aboveground in one on the churchyard crypts, but unfortunately the crypts were in very bad shape. Many of the memorials had crumbled away years ago, leaving only the brick structures, and many were heavily overgrown with ivy and shrubs. Sadly the grave sites had been abandoned both by relatives and by the church. I was at least happy to discover that the memorial on the inside church wall stated the James was the second son of William Robinson of West Grinstead, Sussex (a new clue!!!!,) but saddened by the thought that Sarah's lineage would stop at the church.

I then proceeded to search for their grave sites in the churchyard. There were three crypts outside near the outer wall near where the memorial plaque hung on the interior wall. I decided to look there first. I tore back the heavy ivy cover to expose the crypts. Sadly two of the crypts' memorials had crumbled away, but the third crypt still had the memorial attached. It was almost unreadable, but I was able to faintly see "Robinson". I peered closer and tried to make out what had been inscribed in front of it. I saw an "m" and could make out a "J", and finally the rest of "James" came into view. A warm feeling came over me. I had found James Robinson's grave. Being a spiritual person, I remained by the crypt and talked by my deceased ancestor. I asked for help in researching the family further back, and asked for help finding the royal lineage if it existed."


Maria: Did he talk to you, Sarah? Did you know all about this, and just didn’t tell us?


Sarah: No, I certainly didn’t know about this, but maybe our contact person did. Maybe that is why we are here now, finding out about this.


Jean: (continues reading)


"I then went to the two unmarked crypts to pay respect to Sarah. I didn't want to leave, I wanted to find out more. I walked into town to see if I could find some charcoal and sheets on paper to "rub" the James' crypt to decipher more of the memorial. All I was able to find in town was some tissue paper and crayons and my attempt at "rubbing" upon return to the churchyard, was not successful. Still not satisfied, I peered strongly at the stone, rubbing it with my fingers. I discovered above "James Robinson" the name "Sarah" and the word "relict." I then realized that I had discovered, and had been talking to, Sarah's crypt. I paid my final respects to all three crypts, took some photographs, and left the little town of Egham. I was both happy with my discovery, and saddened that I may not find out anymore about Sarah.

"Upon my return home to Honolulu, this last Monday, I decided to search the Internet for the next generation, William Robinson of West Grinstead. I was not successful. Frustrated with the new clue and no results, I keyed just "Robinson" and "West Grinstead" into Google. The one of the first links on the list that appeared was the link to your second installment of Day After Day on the Open Writing web site. The paraphrase
....The fifth daughter married B. James Robinson of West Grinstead.


"
I immediately clicked on the link. What a surprise! Was I reading a historical passage? What were the chances of an author creating a Sarah and James Robinson of West Grinstead? (I had just discover 5 days earlier at the Egham Parish church that James' father was, and therefore he must also be from West Grinstead.) Sarah in the story was a Burgess. I had seen her referred to as Sarah Burgess on a Latter Day Saints site. They had a daughter who married a James King and the young girl in the story was a King. Was it a coincidence? It couldn't have been. That is why I wrote to the site asking if I might be put in contact with you. When I checked the posting date of your story, I saw that it had just been posted the day before my visit to Egham.


Sarah: Now it is all beginning to make sense. Now I see why we are at this house.


Mary: Shhh. She’s reading some more.


Jean:

"A thought.... I discovered, after asking for help at the crypt of James, that I had actually been asking Sarah. Your storyline involves Sarah's family and not James'. And it revealed a royal lineage. Was Sarah helping me to discover her lineage? I mused that over the years, I have asked, without success, living relatives for information about our lineage, but it was not until I asked a dead relative that information came readily."


Philip: So you are convinced by that, are you? He couldn’t have made it all up?


Jean: No, he provided all the relevant extra names and dates which match exactly with what I know. His great great great great grandmother was Sarah Burgess Robinson. And what is more, he has the brooch that came down into the family from your noble family link, Elizabeth Paulet Bates.


Philip: I don’t believe that for a moment. So what does he want?


Jean: Nothing really, except to know what we know about them. I have this family tree which I can send him. And when he reads my book, he will know all that I do about the Paulet connection, not that that is very much.


Philip: You really think he is serious?


Jean: He was serious enough to come to England to search for their graves.


Philip: Well, it is interesting. But I must admit that I don’t think it really matters much in the whole scheme of things.


Jean: Yes, I know, but what a great story this will make. I’ll have to get going on to writing it right away.


Sarah: Do you think they are relatives of ours too? These people with the funny machine?


Elizabeth: Ah, yes. I’m sure Philip is one of mine. He has the look and the way about him. But what a fitting ending to our snapshots of Earth. We now know that our names and lives will live on, not only in England, but in America, and Hawaii, wherever that is. And this Jean person has written a book about us. I think we can now rest in peace.


Sarah: And they still have my brooch. They might have lost your ring, Elizabeth, but my family gift is still being there, and being cared for.


Elizabeth: All right. I will give you that. But I think it is time we went back to Heaven.

Curtain down.

Reviews
Hi, jean!
Written by Bagheera (679 comments posted) 5th July 2007
A well-rounded and logical conclusion to this series of scenes exploring the concept of how ghosts might view events AFTER "their" time on Earth. 
 
For some reason I can't pinpoint this doesn't work quite so well for me as some of the earlier ones. It's not the change of font from time to time, it's perhaps more the 'sameness' of the standard "English-as-she-is-spoken" from both the ghosts and the 'mortals' - perhaps a more marked difference in speech patterns [even the historical 'provenance' of the words they use????] might make this more 'alive'?? 
 
Not sure you can get away with the rather 'weak' joke as a final line: unless it's a question of a totally O.T.T. delivery reminiscent of Kenneth Williams' Famous Last Words "Frying Tonight!" in one of the 'Carry On' films ... Carry on Screaming or Carry on Caesar I think it might have been ! :grin  
 
I'll sit quietly at the back of the classroom and let someone else give out the pencils, shall I :? :roll :eek
Thanks Paul
Written by jean.day (2196 comments posted) 5th July 2007
For reading it and for your comments. I am not sure what if anything I will do with it, but I will bear your comments in mind if I decide to tack it on to the end of my family biography book which I am in the middle of at the moment.  
 
Writing only facts and figures is quite hard work but I dare say it will be appreciated more than my flights of fancy.

Written by Phil (6388 comments posted) 6th July 2007
Enjoyed all of these Jean, and this was a good finalle (sp) to the series. I was thinking you might come right up to the here and now for the last one. Like B, a little unsure about the last line. It doesn't quite fit with the rest. 
 
Thanks for the reads. 
 
Phil.
Thanks Phil
Written by jean.day (2196 comments posted) 6th July 2007
for sticking with it and reading it all. I took out the last sentence, but I think it needs something at the end. Just can't think what.

Written by Lizzy (781 comments posted) 9th July 2007
Yes, I thought you rounded it off well, bringing it up to the present day. 
Lizzy
Thanks Lizzy
Written by jean.day (2196 comments posted) 11th July 2007
Very kind of you to read it to the end. I'm glad you liked it. And I must admit that it does annoy me that this relative in Hawaii has a genuine keepsake, while the one that should have come down our stand of the family is lost. I wrote to him twice, and sent him some pictures of his relatives - but have had no more replies - so maybe he made it all up after all.
Well done again, Jean!
Written by Clifftown (619 comments posted) 25th July 2007
I've read through all of these heavenly pieces with real interest. I really admire your ability to combine real historical events with such good storytelling - you make it so entertaining to read and it must be much harder to work with real events than fictional ones.  
 
You must be having such an interesting experience with your research. I've been tempted to do my own research into my family history but am worried about what I might find. I've been told in the past that our family is distantly related to the Bronte sisters - but I think that was just wishful thinking on this particular family member's part! 
 

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