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Silver Foil ( swear words)
By maipenrai
05 July 2007
silver foil upon my head
keeps the bastards out my bed,
they zap me here
they zap me there
trying to get
inside my head but
silver foil upon my head
keeps the bastards out my bed.

i see them here
i see them there
but they won't get me
cause i've had my rum
and silver foil upon my head
will give me peace
when i'm in bed,
yes, silver foil upon my head
will keep my demons out my bed.

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Written by fellpony (1575 comments posted) 5th July 2007
Daft but with its own internal logic Bernie. While I don't pretend to understand why silver foil is so effective at keeping out the "demons", the language and rhythm do make a kind of spell out of the poem.  
 
I was only puzzled by one line, which jars on me - "cause i've had my rum". I don't want it explained, but to me it doesn't fit with the rest :)
Thanks
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 5th July 2007
Thanks for your review. 
 
this came from watching a old film some weeks ago, the Aliens were coming!! to stop them sending transmissions into your head you protected yourself with silver foil hats!!! because they blocked the transmissions !!! 
 
:grin :grin :grin  
 
I just took it from there. 
Bernie

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