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Let's Build an Ark
By Josie
05 July 2007
Look at the pictures of the flooding in the county where I live.  (Luckily we were not hit as badly as this):

http://news.bbc.co.uk/1/hi/in_pictures/6240038.stm 

With the constant threat of flooding, the result of global warming we are told, should we all build arcs instead of houses?  At least we would be prepared for the next time.

Can anyone think of a much better title than mine please?



 Storm clouds blew in, the sky turned black,

The lightning struck, the thunder clapped.

    The heavens opened, down came the rain,

    And our lives will never be the same.

 

Rain  filled the dykes, it filled the streams,

It washed the streets and pavements clean.

    With thieving stealth it crept up walls,

     Then under doors and into halls.

 

This flooding water had no care –

It ran through rooms and up the stairs.

    “Help!  Oh help!” the people cried –

     Lots were saved but five folk died.

 

Now two weeks on, what’s to be done –

When you see your only home has gone?

      Don’t pitch your tent there in that park!

     Get cracking now.  Let's build an ark.



 
 

Copyright 2007
www.whiteheadm.co.uk

Reviews
Josie,
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 5th July 2007
I think your title is very apt, you don't need another one, at least in my humble opinion. Very good.

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 5th July 2007
Actually they have plans for floating houses here in the Netherlands. I don't mean houseboats, but real houses which begin to float when the land on which they're built is flooded. Perhaps they're even built already; I'm not sure. 
In fact they were a solution to stupidity, as some property developer had built houses on the outer marches (that's how my dictionary translates it: The land between the summer and winter dikes along rivers). A few years ago these places were of course flooded (as that's what's they're for: a last back-up), property was damaged. No-one died, but suddenly the local governments realized they had created a problem: They wanted to build on the outer marches, but they didn't want houses to be flooded... 
 
A good poem, as all of yours are, but you cheated a little bit with the rhyme in this one, didn't you? 
Thanks Audrie and Fledermaus
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 5th July 2007
Thanks for your reviews. It was very interesting what you had to say Fledermaus. I think perhaps it is something they shoud think about here also, and perhaps the "ark" was not a silly idea. You have really scrutinised my words, haven't you? Yes, cheated and admit it. Fair enough, black and clapped don't quite match, but try to find something that does. Since there are very few of us on this website that even try to rhyme, please make allowances, ha ha. I have come to the conclusion that it doesn't matter whether you rhyme words that end in m's and n's because they sound almost the same. (You shouldn't have pointed that out to everyone. Now they will all know my miscomings!)

Written by Nance (85 comments posted) 26th July 2007
Dear Josie, 
 
I can’t see why on Earth you’re not satisfied with the title. It’s quite apt. It couldn’t suit better. 
This is number one. Number two: I’m truly sorry about the flood. It must have destroyed hundreds of homes and hopes. I do trust everything will turn fine in the end. 
I did like your poem. It’s well constructed, both plain enough to be read easily and complicated in its meaning. You combined these two qualities very successufully. 
Yours, Ann. 

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