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vagabond
By maipenrai
06 July 2007
i used to be a rich man,
limousines and blonde's
whisky and coke
and all those crazy nights
yes
i used to be a rich man

but now i am a vagabond
nobody calls me Sir
it seems that scumbag
is now my given name
just another that
you don't even see,
i used to be a rich man.

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life's irony
Written by uche (44 comments posted) 6th July 2007
ironic, I wish rich men would 
learn that life's a lottery; a leprechaun...check stanza 2, line 1: 
strongly think you should delete "but".

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 7th July 2007
Agree with uche, the 'but' could be lost. 
 
It still rankles when I see lack of capitalisation, especially for 'I.' Perhaps I'm just old fashioned. 
 
Quite liked this. The idea was good, showed the irony, but didn't really has the bitter bite it needed for me. 
 
Phil.
Hi
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 8th July 2007
Uche and Phil and thank you both for your comments. 
bernie

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